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It's the moment you've all been waiting for, no Iron Skies is not on at the movies. But just as good and 100% guaranteed to contain less Nazis, it's the vote to determine which poem is the greatest of all time amd appears in this thread.
I know this is what you've all been waiting for, it's the only competition run by everyone's favourite moderator, that's me and not Vikki. The Memorable Character elimination ended in a farce, with Auron beating Kefka and Ultros and Celes. That's the kind of vote rigging Mugabe would be proud of.

Anonymous Member: Hey, how do I vote for the poem I want to win?
Me: Well it's easy, it's just like SOTW, do you know how that works?
Anonymous Member: No, I only voted once and it was for a brilliant entry about Dynasty Warriors. Apparently you have to write down why you voted for a particular entry, is that still the case?
Me: Why yes it is, don't forgwt how hard all these people have worked, they must want positive feedback.
Anonymous Member: You are so wise. Is there anything else I need to know?
Me: I don't think so, just remember to stay positive and to have fun.


Now for our amazing entries.

Entry number one.

Narcissus


As the essence of life springs forth through earth
Its beauty flourishes with an elegant call
Yet overlooked by creatures big and small
Such beauty speaks wonders with voices unheard
But this testament to life rests on those which were
As the meaning behind its life begins to fall
Neglected and mistreated and forced to crawl
The beauty remains soft and not blurred
But such beauty comes at a price
and it begins to tie its own noose
As it sways about in an extravagant waltz
As the maintenance of the beauty becomes a vice
The essence of life exceeds its use
and is replaced by that which is false​




Entry number two.

In Theory

A butterfly flaps its wings in China
And I am lost

If, in dire times, chaos causes you to lose your way
Turn, turn yourself to the trees
Not to the trees, not to the leaves, stems, roots, branches
But to the forest which hides among them

It is in the forest that you will find the answers
Not answers, even, dancing in the shafts of light
Shining down between the leaves and branches
But guidance, advice, suggestion.

Two, two paths there are
And one, which is the way

And in the path that leads to light,
We fly right through to darkest night
And in the journey to the sun
We cover light til there is none

And down the road that triumphs dark
Remain we there as all grows stark
As though we live for conflict strong
Tis where we dwell for far too long

But hidden, twixt the two, is the path we strive for
In the forest, between the light and the dark
Lies the middle path, alternating between sections
Of light and dark, as we are blown back and forth

A butterfly flaps its wings in China
And I am found



Entry number three.

Night Light.


Stepping out my door into the night
Seeing stars centered by the moon light
With the clustered star field and it’s arrangement of stars
Polaris shines brighter than the rest
As the stars travel millions of light years away
Appearing in the sky is another guest
A much older star with great influence
Seemingly makes the other stars disappear
The moon lit sky gradually brightens
The end of the night is finally near
Stepping out my door into the night
The dark sky has officially become daylight



Entry number four.


Lament for the Unseen

The clouds, a patch of gold with bright silver linings
Gently took many forms as it swirled in harmony
High above they danced swiftly
Casting a beautiful shadow on a lone man standing on the shore
Whose unshed tears echoed his thousand cries

He sensed the alluring atmosphere in the palm of his hands
The scent of the ocean breeze whiffed through his nostrils
While the rumbling of the waves teased his ears
Echoing the sounds of the whispering wind
But not strong enough to break through his inner defenses

The man went down on his knees
Desperately scooped the rough and moist sand
And rubbed them on his face, careful to avoid his eyes
For even as they are useless, he holds them preciously close
Refused to embrace the eternal darkness it offered for some time

He longed to see the colors of nature more than anything
Not to rely with his touch, feeling his way around this world
To be no longer confronted with the mockery of what’s in front of him
He recognized the cries of the seagulls that breached through his forlorn heart
And in that single moment, his own renewed cries went flying with them



Entry number five.

Such beautiful plants
That we all cherish
Such beautiful animals
That will continue to perish
If CO2 continues to exist
Then the nature's things will be extinct
Beavers and Roses
If you care, you need to think
So that was my poem on nature
Don't harm the world, be more mature.​
 
Night Light. I love stars, I love the poem, and words used. Simple as that.
 
Geez, 5 entrants and only 2 results? Come on people, lets see some poetry viewing!

I'm voting entry number 4, Lament for the Unseen because it's pretty powerful. The naturous (is that even a word?) journey of a blind man (or so I assume) goes into great detail about his unexpressed emotions, I like it!
 
It was between #1 and #4 for me. Both are strong in language and in imagery. The one thing about #1 that bugged me a little, though, was that it looked like it wanted to be a sonnet, but didn't quite sonnet-ize itself. So that tips me over to #4.

Good work to all the entrants.
 
I voted for number 4: Lament for the Unseen.

It felt more like a small story in a way and I really rather enjoyed it. It was very descriptive and felt very dark.

I liked In Theory too and it was hard to choose out of the two, but 4 won me over.

Well done to all!
 
Narcissus


As the essence of life springs forth through earth
Its beauty flourishes with an elegant call
Yet overlooked by creatures big and small
Such beauty speaks wonders with voices unheard
But this testament to life rests on those which were
As the meaning behind its life begins to fall
Neglected and mistreated and forced to crawl
The beauty remains soft and not blurred
But such beauty comes at a price
and it begins to tie its own noose
As it sways about in an extravagant waltz
As the maintenance of the beauty becomes a vice
The essence of life exceeds its use
and is replaced by that which is false​

At first, I believed it was about the Idolatry of Beauty in modern cultures, especially the Western Cultures.

However, I tend to shift my opinion to something more, "natural", as if the poem were focused on how the beauty of nature speaks with its impressive splendor. Also how nature seems to be abused, drained of all life by those who do not seem to value it. We can add to that that nature nowadays is being replaced by artificial environments, houses, resorts, hotels...organizations and constructions based on exploiting the natural resources.
Good one.

In Theory

A butterfly flaps its wings in China
And I am lost

If, in dire times, chaos causes you to lose your way
Turn, turn yourself to the trees
Not to the trees, not to the leaves, stems, roots, branches
But to the forest which hides among them

It is in the forest that you will find the answers
Not answers, even, dancing in the shafts of light
Shining down between the leaves and branches
But guidance, advice, suggestion.

Two, two paths there are
And one, which is the way

And in the path that leads to light,
We fly right through to darkest night
And in the journey to the sun
We cover light til there is none

And down the road that triumphs dark
Remain we there as all grows stark
As though we live for conflict strong
Tis where we dwell for far too long

But hidden, twixt the two, is the path we strive for
In the forest, between the light and the dark
Lies the middle path, alternating between sections
Of light and dark, as we are blown back and forth

A butterfly flaps its wings in China
And I am found
Revolves around the re-discovery of ourselves and our ties to nature. It also depicts the distint roads presented, and how sometimes we must step back to our tracks and see where was the time when we lost ourselves.

Nice ^^
Night Light.


Stepping out my door into the night
Seeing stars centered by the moon light
With the clustered star field and it’s arrangement of stars
Polaris shines brighter than the rest
As the stars travel millions of light years away
Appearing in the sky is another guest
A much older star with great influence
Seemingly makes the other stars disappear
The moon lit sky gradually brightens
The end of the night is finally near
Stepping out my door into the night
The dark sky has officially become daylight
Wow...deep....I am speechless. I love the night. Remember that sometimes the star with the greatest light usually is the flash of a star who has already died...
Lament for the Unseen

The clouds, a patch of gold with bright silver linings
Gently took many forms as it swirled in harmony
High above they danced swiftly
Casting a beautiful shadow on a lone man standing on the shore
Whose unshed tears echoed his thousand cries

He sensed the alluring atmosphere in the palm of his hands
The scent of the ocean breeze whiffed through his nostrils
While the rumbling of the waves teased his ears
Echoing the sounds of the whispering wind
But not strong enough to break through his inner defenses

The man went down on his knees
Desperately scooped the rough and moist sand
And rubbed them on his face, careful to avoid his eyes
For even as they are useless, he holds them preciously close
Refused to embrace the eternal darkness it offered for some time

He longed to see the colors of nature more than anything
Not to rely with his touch, feeling his way around this world
To be no longer confronted with the mockery of what’s in front of him
He recognized the cries of the seagulls that breached through his forlorn heart
And in that single moment, his own renewed cries went flying with them
I need time to read this one again...
Such beautiful plants
That we all cherish
Such beautiful animals
That will continue to perish
If CO2 continues to exist
Then the nature's things will be extinct
Beavers and Roses
If you care, you need to think
So that was my poem on nature
Don't harm the world, be more mature.​
Defend the nature, got the message. But no depth...the message was too direct.

The beauty of poetry is to hide messages since it leaves more freedom to write.

But a good poem nonetheless :)


I'll cast my vote later :)
 
When I first read all these entries, Number 2 really caught my attention for some reason. So I had to re-read them a few times more and Number 1 also really grabbed me due to the detailed imagery. I had a hard time choosing between the two, but after much thought on the matter, I really have to stick to Number 2 afterall. I guess the unique tone is what really did it...it seems to have that intense and suspense manner of writing which I really like. It's as if the writer is guiding the readers to something, and then as it gets deeper, the "And I am found" line was such simple but powerful effect. I love it; one of the most beautiful poems I've read for awhile.
 
Out of the night that covers me;
blake as the pit from pole to pole
I thank whatever gods may be
for my unconquerable soul

In the fell clutch of circumstance
I have not winced nor cried aloud
Under the bludgeoning of chance
my head is bloody but unbowed

In this place of wrath and tears
looms but the horror of the shade
and yet the menace of the years
finds an shall find me unafraid

It matters not how straight the gate
how charge with punishement the scroll
i am the masterof my fate;
i am the captain of my soul;
 
Er...you do realize that this is for voting purposes, yes? xDD But great poem there.
 
#4 I put myself within the character inspired by whoever wrote it. For some odd reason I could recognize every sensual imagery as though I was feeling it myself. I give kuddos to the person who wrote this.

Great job!
 
Only 24 hours left to vote.

So hurry up and get your votes in, help make your favourite poem a winner, and you'll also get post count +1 so vote before you run out of time.
 
Congratulations to the winner Mitsuki.
Yay Yay, let us all celebrate and party endlessly.
 
Hmm, wasn't expecting to win this one but great job to everyone who entered. May we find out who did which entries by any chance...?

Also, I think we might go ahead and do this monthly if enough people are up for it.
 
Also, I think we might go ahead and do this monthly if enough people are up for it.
I think getting enough people to write a poem for the contest is the biggest issue. I certainly wouldn't mind seeing it, but considering our birthweek festivity netted us 5 entries, we may be out of luck getting enough entrants to do this monthly. I foresee that every month will have 3 poems. One from you, one from CC and one from me, but I guess that works anyways. :awesome:
 
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