Poetry Sweet Rapture

[Amizon]

This is a sonnet I've had to write for tonight's poetry lecture. Let me know what you think!



Sweet Rapture

Your resonating presence is beautiful in this light
and your fingers flawlessly play away on the piano. Before
you showed me your world and gave me your insight
into this love, this sweet rapture, knowing you are more.

The lullaby plays on. We sit together as one
and I am bedazzled by your amazing grace
in this old-fashioned room. The deal is done
now, but this won’t become an arms race.

I remember the amazing views that we saw
from up above in the trees. I never thought
such a world existed, one that was not under law
and one that cannot be easily sought.

You’re so beautiful outside. Inside, you were alone —
You’ve waited so long, now you’re no longer the lone.

 

[Eight]

Deep and quite powerful, though quite a generic feeling, I still like it Painted a simplistic and yet effective picture in my head.

Well done Ami.

 

[Linnaete]

Ami, you should walk into that poetry lecture with pride. I love your sonnet, and I think you really have thought it through exceptionally well. After a nightmarish English session on Carol Ann Duffy’s poems, I’m glad to realise that it is just her style of writing poems I don’t like, rather than all poems in general.

I loved your third stanza, as it portrays human emotions really well using your narrative persona- how moments of joy presents the world in a beautiful light. It’s a powerful image, simple yet effective.