Poetry Feir's Poetry

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Doaj

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This is just some of my favorites. I don't like most of hwta (wow, that typo is severe. *What) I write, but if you'd like to read some of my shitty work then it's all in blogs on my myspace (/ebin_coolio). If I get a lot of response (or a little) then I'll put up more.

Cobalt


It rusts away in wind and rain
Gone one day, tomorrow the pain
What you think won't be the same
And the taint drives me insane

I feel pulled toward her epicenter
I still remember when I met her
A different woman than she is today
In her silence there's a lot to say

I felt inclined to push apart
Feeling like magnets in the dark
I can't seem to find where we reside
Where we stay in the drift of time

Seas of Cobalt, torrents of love
All I want is to keep this hug
Lasting forever, a magnetic connection
The hold of the Cobalt gives me protection

Swirls of life
Move on by
Much less strife
Calms the storm's eye

My eyes do not blink
My mind cannot think
I'm moving where I've been
Time is backward on its spin

Where you've once been
Is where I'll be
That should be a given
And if you don't see

I will trim your grudge
Life I willn't decree
You can believe my touch
For eternity

Seas of Cobalt, torrents of love
All I want is to keep this hug
Lasting forever, a magnetic connection
The hold of the Cobalt gives me protection


Release Me
​

-A dedication to India Escobar.

Thank you for letting me cry.-


My soul is stuck
Oh, I curse my luck
I remain where lightning struck
And I scream Fuck Me

Release me
Give me shelter from the storm
Decease me
Hold me close to your form

I am an infant
And I cry
I am a miscreant
Help me die

Release me
Give me shelter from the storm
Decrease me
Hold me close to your form

A hiccup as the tears stop
I need someone to be my rock
Please hold me as I lose control
Of every thought, my body, my soul

I'm losing my mind
But I still see your face
You may be gone
But you still have your place

Release me
Give me shelter from the storm
Decree me
Hold me close to your form

God holds you now
Release me
I can't think of how
Decease me

Release me!
Oh, release me
Give me shelter!
Oh give me shelter
Please, God, decease me
Hold me close to your form
Hold me close to your form


Nitrogen


Nitrogen, or lack thereof
You can't understand what I'm thinking of
How my breathing is short when I'm high in the sky
My face turns blue and the world slowly dies

I try to breathe and hyperventilate
I try too hard and overcompensate
As I float higher into the atmosphere
I hate what I see when I look in the mirror

Everything dances as I run short of breath
A blur of motion, an overwater depth
None understand how I feel vertigo
As I reach stratosphere I watch the lightshow

A crime against nature, call me what you will
A crime against God, Nitrogen I steal
A thief, a criminal, I just need my air
A child, I am weak, I need God's care

I know your clockwork
You should feel threatened of my tools
I will dismantle the lives
And rid the world of its fools

Nitrogen, or lack thereof
When it comes from push to shove
I'll put you deep down below
And laugh and cry from above

A crime against nature, call me what you will
A crime against humanity, it gives me a thrill
A thief, a criminal, I just need my air
Blastphemer and fragile, I need God's care​
 
That is wonderful, Feir. I especially liked Release Me. I love how emotional it is.
 
Release Me is written about a girl who went to my school. She died in an unexpected drug and car accident. It kinda hit me hard.

Any criticism?
 
wow all three of them are great but Release me is the best one it has so much passion and emotion inot it i may have some poetry thjat i did myself its nowhere as close as this. bravo absolutly talentd., :)
 
Antimony
As I draw you in for a sweet, little kiss
One thing I want said, remember this
I love you more than you'll ever know
You couldn't believe how you make my heart glow

As I pull away from your trembling lips
I'll tell you the world through my fingertips
As I trace them down your arm, make your hair stand on end
We become one, our hearts will blend

As I breathe in your scent, your smell, your antimony
My mind gets lost in the Aegean Sea
And I sink, will you pull me to shore?
I want things they way they were before

Before you filled me with antimony
Before the blame was all on me
Back to the days when you pretended to care
Back when we sat in your shed, our lair

Way back when, I remember so clearly
You told me nothing, you were a mystery
Yet I felt you were mine, I love your kisses
I hope one day you'll be my Mrs.

As I breathe in your scent, your smell, your antimony
I can't help but reminisce so sweetly
On every word, look, I'm hooked, I feel shook
How with a simple Post-It, my heart you took


Zirconium & Rhodium
Inject me with zirconium
I don't want any of
Whatever you have to offer
But I can't get my mind off her

For as much as I try
I want it all
In her arms I lie
Don't leave me in free fall

As springtime comes around
I take in all the sounds
As the flowers tower the ground
Emotions lost are now found

All at a cost, what will you lose
If you don't sacrifice, then you don't choose
I recommend you put away
Everything you cherish today

A life cut short, but I won't mourn
I just can't care, I feel airborne
Everything I say I've sworn
Those who do not sacrifice I scorn

Simple rules and simple times,
I see my love ahead of mine
But I'll run and run so I can catch
Everything except my breath

I hold you close in the summer's heat
Tenderized, my heart beats
Sweat sticks to the leather seats
As we drive down the city streets

Every moment shared with you
Is one that I know what to choose
I cannot lose if memories I gain
Blood and teeth, I feel no pain

Simple rules and simple times,
I see my love ahead of mine
But I'll run and run so I can catch
Everything except my breath

So, inject me with zirconium
I don't give a fuck
I don't want any of
Your stupid fucking luck

So long as my blood flow slows
And the cold finds my fingers and toes
Then I know I'll find happiness
As I return to Heaven lifeless


Magnesium
Compression expands
And the world will dance
On the shoulders of giants
I see her stand

Watching from above
The world will collapse
Nothing to speak of
But how I'll relapse

Into another tense
The world shall commence
Its firefight of war
A Magnesium core

An air raid overhead
The skins of lies are shed
Corpses line the streets before
And every second are too many more

For years on end
The wicked shall sin
Its firefight of war
A Magnesium core

My love everlasting
throughout this ordeal
A smile plays cross my face
As your heart I steal

For this battle rages only in my head
The bullets in my body, hope not lead
For our future, for the days to come
For my love of you, and for our son


Love Hero
Do not fear
You shall be saved
You need to hear
The wonders of the day
I am your hero
You're no longer falling
I hold you close, oh
Thank you, I am crying
I stand before the earth
With everything at my feet
My life you are worth
I shall triumph through defeat
I can tell you again
A thousand million times
Just take a deep breath in
Everything will be fine
I can make you satiated
I will save your deepest blips
For your emotions mean everything
I tell you; this is it
​
 
I'm just starting and I'd say my poems are alright-ish, but you're are...fucking inspiring

Criticisms? Not really xD
 
Well, I see that you are some really good poems and those poetry are truly
inspiring. Do you got more? Everyone would like to see more :P

However I think, if you ain´t got yet, you need to make it more diverse and
you can do it modifying the poems structure as you want to. That´s nothing out of the ordinary if those are really yours (and I believe so). And the subject can be more diverse as well. You decide and keep increasing your talent!
 
Haha, I'm kind of a science geek, but unfortunately I don't and haven't. In my sophomore year my last name starts with a W, and so the seniors, juniors, and all but 1 student got to choose classes before me. I couldn't take science for a year because the classes were filled.

If people want more I can do that. I think I'll comment some peoples' work after that. :D


EDIT:
Into Open Water
​

The water is freezing and the boat is sinking. Frost coats my blinking eyelashes as I struggle to keep myself afloat. I worry about my health and thinking of all the deadly instincts, can't help but wonder if I'll be saved from these things; these hideous beasts of nature beneath me, underneath the surface of history, the black chill of ice water is numbing against my feet, my toes feel nothing and everything is noisy. Near death it seems to be that sound is exemplified, and I die and I'm mystified by everything I wish I'd done. I feel myself try to hide from everything coming for me. Teary eyed I'm full of surprise as I manage to swim away. I know it gives chase and as I collide, it tears into me and I claw at its hide. I let out a scream but it's just a cry and I knew one way or another I'd die, but I didn't think it'd be this way, I never suspected it'd be today and I sure as fuck didn't think it'd be your teeth that penetrate into my side, rip me open and spill my insides into the open water.

A Sigh Of Relief
I hardly can stand
Why do I try?
Like a plane I need to land
But I just close my eyes

The anticipation too great
I almost want to end it
Before its too late
I don't know where to send it
I can't stand all my worry
My visions getting blurry
Please end my fretfrul chaos
And send me home in a box

You don't know how much I love you
I breathe a sigh of relief
Everytime I hear those words
I am filled with disbelief
Please keep up this good work
For without pain there'd be no high
When I hear your voice I perk
When you lie I wither and dry
I don't come first on your list
I'm at the end of your fist
But I see the light at the end
Tera, you're a god-send


No Impersonal Yous [A Continuation: Trisha]
Together we stand.
I reach out and yearn and you hold my hand.
You pull in close and we embrace in a kiss.
Nothing can describe to you just how much I miss.
Your sweet voice, how you squeak like a toy.
When you snuggle against me, fill me with joy.
The desire I'm filled with as I take your breath,
the willingness to stay to and beyond death.
How I long for you this moment,
to smell your reminiscent scent.
To close my eyes and hold you close,
to wake up with you is what I need the most.
So forever and on in bliss from above,
I think I can say, it is you that I love.
​
 
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