Original [discuss]The Secret of Memories

[Captain Squee]

First thing I wanna say is, this is not set in chapters, I will only post as fast as I feel like transferring it all from paper to computer...it's annoying, but I wanna share...

So now we shall discuss my story

The story: Link

 

[Six]

I'm not usually a big reader, but I really liked how the first paragraph caught my attention. The title was part of my mind's curiosity to check it out. Looking really nice so far.

 

[Captain Squee]

My second typed up part popping up in 30 seconds.

I'm glad you like it so far Kira. Anyone who likes Bleach concepts other than Zanpakuto concepts would like this story, as it is inspired by it. However, only a little was carried over. By a little I mean you might only get that impression from one or two details if I didn't tell you. Even the concepts that were carried over were altered by a lot

Anyway, Time to post this second part...

 

[Gaige]

This is pretty good. The beginning was tense and that tension carried over to the next part. It also had a cliffhanger-like ending, which I do like. There were a few grammar and spelling mistakes here and there, but nothing that interrupted the story, which flowed very well. I hope you continue this.

 

[Captain Squee]

CHARACTER INFO:

Name: ???? (Taking on the name Skylar Toshio and Blue)

Age: ???? (looks early to mid 20's)

Eye color: Blue

Hair color: Blond

Overall appearance: http://i913.photobucket.com/albums/ac335/Squee251/IMG_4600.jpg

Body type: slim, healthy, well toned, Caucasian skin.

Physical handicap: Amnesia
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Name: Tianna Rashna

Age: 18

Eye color: Blue

Hair color: Blue

Overall appearance: http://i913.photobucket.com/albums/ac335/Squee251/IMG_4601.jpg

Body type: Thin, small, long legs, shorter than average, Caucasian skin tone

Physical handicap: N/A

More info to come.

 

[Gaige]

Good chapter. I like Tianna. She seems to have a great emotional range, and her lighthearted entrance offered a slightly more relaxed perspective. Good job.