The Legacy of the Fallen

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Name: Landon T. McAllister
Title: None
Race: Human
Gender: Male
Age: 17 (Born August 5)

Hair: Blonde, medium-long, straight. Sometimes wears a headband to match his outfit, if so it's worn as a headband, coming around the center of his head and tucked behind his ears, tied at the base of his skull underneath his hair.
Eyes: Blue
Height: 5'11"
Weight: 160 lbs.
Complexion: Just barely tanned, smooth with a few freckles on his forearms and cheeks. Scar on his right shoulder in a simple diagonal line, ending at his collar bone.
Build: Toned, but not muscular. More like a lean dude. ;]
Noteworthy Features: Always wears a dog tag necklace that says 'June' on one side, blank on the other. Has a scar described in 'Complexion' section.
Attire: Generally wears whatever is comfortable, but more specifically jeans and printed t-shirts or polos. Wears sweaters during the winter time, but not those giant itchy ones your grandparents wear; likes to be fashionable, but casual at the same time.

Appeareance in a Nutshell:
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Personality: Was once very bullying, rude, sarcastic and cutting, but a recent tragedy in his life has changed his entire demeanor. Is now a bit more reserved and aloof, but still has his silver tongue in case he needs to use it. Relatively anti-social, but it is indeed possible to make friends with him if you can appeal to him. In his Academy, he has taken on the secluded handsome man role, but perhaps new friendships and a new crowd will allow him to come out of his shell...

First Impression: Landon would typically eye the approacher in disinterest, though he wouldn't turn his attention away entirely. He is used to being used and followed, so he doesn't really have a good opinion on people. He's more likely to make a smart remark either on purpose or simply by accident, or perhaps even crack a joke. It depends on the 'good situation'. In bad situations, he's most likely to stick up for himself should someone try and start some trouble, using his quick wit and sharp mind to overcome his antagonists rather than his weapons.

Weapon(s): Valkyrie, a long wooden staff that has a strip of golden metal engraved, wrapping around the shaft for the entire length of the weapon.
Armor: Just his clothes.

Magic (Low focus = less chance of spell succeeding, less damage and vice versa):

White Magic
Cure/Cura (Revitalizes character 25%/50% of health. Drains mana a little/some. 40% base accuracy, +.5% per Focus point.) [A swarm of white streams swirl around Landon's hand before swimming out to envelop the target in a revitalizing light.]

Green Magic
Haste (Speeds up character. Drains mana some, drains focus some. 20 minute duration. 30% base accuracy, +.5% per Focus point.) [A translucent speeding-up clock appears over the target's head.]
Protect (Adds to the defense of the character. Drains mana some. 20 minute duration. 30% base accuracy, +.5% per Focus point.) [A radial green light spins in front of Landon to form a concave magical shield before fading away slowly.]
Shell (Adds to the magical defense of the character. Drains mana some. 20 minute duration. 30% base accuracy, +.5% per Focus point.) [Red laser beams swirl around Landon, spinning upward to form a dome of crimson light before fading away slowly.]

Black Magic
Fire (Casts a little fire damage against the enemy. Drains mana a little. 30% base accuracy, +.5% per Focus point.) [A good sized fireball shoots out from Landon's hand, with red sparks cracking behind it as it goes outward.]
Blizzard/Blizzara/Blizzaga (Casts a little/some/a lot of ice damage against the enemy. Drains mana a little/some/a lot. 30% base accuracy, +.5% per Focus point). [Ice shards shoot at the target, 'exploding' upon contact.] [Pillars of ice shoot out of the ground in a deadly trail towards the target.] [Streams of ice swirl around the target, encasing him/her/it in a suit of ice before exploding.]
Thunder (Casts a little lightning damage against the enemy. Drains mana a little. 30% base accuracy, +.5% per Focus point.) [A 'sonic boom' of electrical energy is launched at the target, sizzling upon contact.]
Leech (Absorbs the enemy's focus. Drains mana a little. 80% base accuracy, +.1% per point of focus.) [Blue bubbles float out of the target's hands, snaking towards Landon's hands and coating his arms in a blue light before fading away.]
Osmose (Absorbs the enemy's mana. Drains focus a little. 50% base accuracy, +.25% per point of focus.) [Red bubbles float out of the target's hands, snaking towards Landon's hands and coating his arms in a red light before fading away.]

Special Magic
Barricade (Throws up a penetrable wall of magic. This wall is divided into 'sections', all pieces not visible to the naked eye, but lighting up blue when touched/ran into. Serves as a mobile 'Protect' spell of sorts, used in RP as a forcefield that the enemy has to attack aggressively to get through. Drains mana a little, drains focus a lot. 65% base success, +.1% per Focus point.)

Doomsday (Landon uses his magical properties to 'explode', sending out a radial wave of energy that has destructive properties. Intensity of the blast is determined by how focused Landon is. Drains mana a lot, drains focus a little. 40% base accuracy, +.1% per Focus point.)

Magus Soul (Landon uses opportunities in the battle to take a bit of time to refocus his thoughts. Raises focus some, lowered defense. 65% base accuracy, +.15% per Focus point.)

Abilities/Skills: Very persuasive. Also knows how to cultivate herbs, permitting him to create his own echo herbs and phoenix downs should he have the necessary resources.

Quick History: Landon McAllister was born into a musical family, with his father playing the piano and his mother a singer. From a young age, he showed great signs of intelligence, but it seemed to be misplaced as all he wanted to do is go out and cause trouble with his friends. In school, he was the class clown and simultaneously the handsome and flirtacious male vixen, but his mere personality was enough to put people off. Crude, sarcastic, and witty, he was able to turn anything said about him and throw it back at his naysayers with class. Such is the reason why Landon fell into the wrong crowd, and resorted to drinking and vandalism throughout his pre-teen years.

Although he had (and still has) an impentrable exterior, there is indeed a softer side to this young McAllister. Writing and music are his passions, though he hides these things to prevent himself from appearing to be the "sensitive metrosexual freak". It was his birthright to become an artistic man, but he was not proud of this fickle lineage, instead wanting to be the clean-cut leather jacket wearing social alleycat that no one would pick on or push around. That wasn't the life for him.

At age 16, disaster reared its ugly head as it somehow conveniently does no matter what the circumstances. One day, Landon decided to come home and visit for a bit, having gone through exams at the Academy and already quite stressed. When he entered the threshold to his humble abode, he would find
his mother dead on the couch, a bottle of whisky in the now limp hand that barely grazed the floor.
It was at this point where Landon's life completely changed,
his last source of inspiration and motivation gone since his father was in the military, and was seemingly stuck there for life.

Landon changed. Instead of being the suave and critical class clown, he refined himself into a more mature man, even though he was still a teenager. With a life plagued by deception, greed, and misfortune, he threw away his past, changed his attitude, and changed his outlook on the world. So much time had been wasted, Landon did not know if he could make anything out of his life anymore; his peers were already focusing on their expertises, while he had no talent to describe thanks to his churlish antics for the past many years. Although he did not want to, Landon knew that he would have to dive into his studies and work to become a decorated cadet at his Academy not only because he needed to graduated, but
in honor of the woman who gave him a place to call home.

Now,
only a year since his mother's death,
Landon exists as a questionable entity, not quite finding his place in the world, and now having no social clique to rely on to carry him through life. Now, he was on his own. Now, he had to make his own path to follow, without holding anyone's hand along the way.
 
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First and foremost - Magic.

I see no real description of what the spells actually do. Ok, for example, you say that Cura revitalizes. How much does it revitalize?

This is in essence the same for all of your skills. How much damage do they do, what limits them, etc. One real quam I have is with Dispel. Esuna is really redundant, since status afflictions are against the rules here, but you can't have Dispel. It removes beneficial status effects from the foe, and that in and of itself is considered god-modding.

Osmose and Leech are alright, but you have to state accuracy as well for all of your skills. I wouldn't say all normally, but from the way you talk about them, they seem to be 100% accurate.

Teleportation is also against the rules, as it allows you to go somewhere instantly. That isn't allowed, as you can just teleport right beside an enemy and stab them.

I'll leave it at that for now. There is still a lot, but I've given you enough to work with.
 
Oh, well I haven't seen any 'battle' guidelines, so I was unaware of how to approach the magic category. I can't really incorporate numbers, since there isn't a statistics system when it comes to RPing, is there?
 
Now for another quam that I seem to have overlooked: originality.

I'm not going to judge anything, in case I am in the wrong, until I know one thing:

Is this character being made for URPGs, ORPGs, or RPBs? Or a combination of them?
 
I don't know what those acronyms stand for. >>

Basically, as far as the spells go, I didn't know if 'a lot' was an appropriate variable to put as the effectiveness for spells. It's kind of vague, and thus I don't know what kind of specifics are required of this kind of RP board.
 
Sorry about that, I'm back now ;)

There are battles in ORPGs as well. RPBs are just that; battles between chracters. URPGs and ORPGs are more along the lines of an extended story, but usually tend to have battles. Either way, you'll likely be getting into fights.

Reality.Fantasy said:
Basically, as far as the spells go, I didn't know if 'a lot' was an appropriate variable to put as the effectiveness for spells. It's kind of vague, and thus I don't know what kind of specifics are required of this kind of RP board.

I have a new template up for the Bios. You don't have to change to this template, as you've already got it in the one you have now, but that template will probably give you a better idea of what is expected for magic.
 
Okay I took out Esuna and Dispel and edited in some 'damage' for Cure/Cura and the black magic spells, but as far as accuracy goes I believe I already outlined in the header that accuracy depended on my amount of Focus. Like, if Landon was at 50% focus, then his spells would have 50% chance to hit.
 
Alright, I think I remember you telling me something bout 20 minutes for the duration of spells like Haste? That is fine, but you'll have to put it into the bio; I still can't find it in there.

There is one problem with your idea for focus: at 100% focus, the spell will have a 100% chance of hitting. I'm all for having a better chance of hitting as your focus is better, but I think it should have a set base-accuracy, and an increase by a factor of X (whatever factor you decide, as long as it is acceptable) as the Focus rises. I actually like your idea o having focus and magic, it makes the character a whole lot more interesting.

Now, for a less pressing, but no less important, problem. How the spells look. If the revitalizing spells, for example, are pretty much invisible, that's fine, but you have to say that. However, your Fira, Blizzaga, etc. spells must be seen, and we must know what they look like.

That's all for now ;)
 
Grah, didn't even notice that you posted until now. D:

I think I edited all of the things you said. Anything else?
 
o_O almost three weeks, and you didn't notice I posted :P

Excellent job on this bio. I find it to be [APPROVED]. Have fun Rping ^_^
 
Haha, I saw that you posted in the SB, and was like, 'hmm... I should go check my bio!' I mark all forums as read too much. :P

And thanks... I think I could have done better, but I'm satisfied with the finished product. Thanks for working conmigo.
 
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