Poetry The Darkness of Me

[Sexy Beast]

this is one of my poems....please comment if you will


the beating of my heart
racing from time to time
the pace of my feet
running to a place of nothingness
the killing of my soul
from that figure that can't go away
when i see it ,
i want to run away,hide,
sheild myself from the truth of my darkness.

 

[The Messenger]

Interesting poem. It seems like you are hiding from the darkness. As if there is something that is coming after you, to kill you, and you are trying to hide, in fear, from it. Is this what you are going for?

 

[Sexy Beast]

im actually hiding the truth of something that can come to haunt me in the near feature.

 

[The Messenger]

I see. In this poem, is there any way to change the future to where this thing won't come?

 

[Sexy Beast]

yes there is but only a way that i can think of

 

[The Messenger]

I am unable to see it in your poem. Can you point it out?

 

[Junior]

I thought that the poem was about you running away from your past..your dark memories and being more aware of cause of those experiences...so in other words prepared for the future and progressing cause of the past

 

[Sexy Beast]

alrite the meaning of the poem is that im running away and not turning back. there is something in my past that i cant face. that is the point in this poem.

 

[The Messenger]

I see. If I may ask, why can't you face whatever this is, that happened in the past?

 

[Sexy Beast]

i will tell you on ym. its a ittle personal. i nt want to sayit on the forums. where everyone can see it. no offence everyone its just something i don'twant to make public.

 

[The Messenger]

I understand. So will you be making other poems as well? You have done a good job, so far.

 

[Sexy Beast]

shortly yes but not anytime soon. have to come up with i deas or something like that.

 

[The Messenger]

That is cool. They always say, "Good things come to those who wait."
I do look forward to it.

 

[Sexy Beast]

well you will not be dissipointed so i will come up with some good ideas but in the meantime you will have to wait just like the other people who read my poems.

 

[Xemnaroth]

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I found reading the poem to be quite interesting. I can sense a certain feeling of fear, the wanting of running away from it, exactly like you say. I have to say, it was quite good ^^

 

[Sexy Beast]

Why thank you, honoestly i would of thought that this thread was long gone.. but you seemed to have "found" it.

 

[Takumi]

Nice poem!
The mood sounds dark and mysterious... its great!

 

[Sexy Beast]

Wrote it ages ago, but it is still one of my originals, i was a bit depressed at that time....but not anymore..

 

[Takumi]

I agree with you,
every time i feel depressed, i feel like making poems^^

 

[oOTidusOo]

i will probably be massacred for criticizing you, but you give me the impression your one of those "i hate life, gonna slash myself" people. i read your poem, and it doesnt stand out to me at all, if i got in the mood i could write something like that, just from saying a few things that were bad in my life.