POTM # 1 Voting

[Mitsuki]

Thanks to those who entered! And now here's the fabulous poems, with the theme, "Halloween".

Bear in mind that you do not need to post your reasons in order to vote, although it is encouraged.

Voting will end on Octobor 31. Good luck to those who entered!

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Monsters

It’s the time of the year again
Where the children go trick or treating,
Unaware of the real monsters lurking
That they very well could be meeting,
Halloween reveals the celebrations
Of the creatures we give a beating.

But it does make you thoroughly wonder
Who are the monsters, the true evil within,
Behind closed doors can be entirely different
Opposed to masks they wear in the morning,
The day protects us from their horrifying faces
The night reveals a sight so chillingly terrifying.

Vampires, werewolves, demons, skeletons
Witches, sorcerers, ghosts, all of them,
Believing that they are fantasies is wrong
For they themselves are the curse of the damned,
Which we may ultimately become someday
The thriller will come and they will become the nemesis.

And when the transformation is finally complete
The monster will emerge, its strength immense,
Ready to devour its victims in its relentless rage
Even through this, all will be seen as such nonsense,
It is mindless and shall attack all who threaten it
Thus the legend of Halloween finally comes to be sense.

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Fall Children

Children all around the neighborhood rejoice
For the season of autumn has arrived
A time to dress up as something scary
And scream “trick or treat” at the top of their voice

The special holiday of Halloween is now here
The fate of the night is determined by quantity
With a pillow case full of candy
The children can come home with a smile and a cheer

The journey starts at the fall of night
And going door to door in search of one thing
The start of screaming “trick or treat”
To see if the children can bring the adults fright

In the wake of the nights progress
The children go home to count their candy
With enough candy to last for weeks
For the fall children, Halloween was a success

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Untitled

Five children went out on this Halloween
Night, all of them vanished without a sight
Here are their tales, please hold down the scream
Or you will be the next to vanish in the extreme

Number five was brave, thought he would survive
He headed out into the night, careless in his strife
The night swallowed him whole, with just one bite
His carelessness was his fall, he didn’t have time to fight

Number four was lost in a crowd so thick
No one saw the vampire pick him up quick
His mother and father searched everywhere
And decided in the end to go home, and not care

The third went up to Miss Dorothy's house
That little old lady, well size does not count
She greeted him nicely, opened the door
And closed it behind him, the boy now on her floor

The second was running home, rather quick you see
A zombie came out, tackling him and all he was to be
Ripping flesh from bone, and having no remorse
That little boy stood no chance while the devil took his course

The last little boy got home, with a dash
And was swiped from his bedroom for some quick cash
A little old witched needed the spirit of a good boy
For the potion she was brewing and he was the toy

So you see, Halloween night, can be such a freight
Be careful what you do, be careful all night
A demon is at bay, waiting for you to be alone
He might just pick you up and take you to his home.

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The Mask

it hides who you are​

but it does not go very far​

those who know you can see​

no matter who you pretend to be​

they pretend not to know​

but it will show​

in how they act​

and suspicion it will attract​

even those who you never knew​

will eventually see though​

any deception you will don​

and soon all of it will be gone​

and all you will be​

is someone like you or me​

who tried to escape reality​

and in the end​

with the mask rend​

you can not​

undo the plot​

that you tried to hide​

the mystery is open wide​

big or small​

it will be open to all

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Hallow's Night

Pumpkins aglow in the cold eerie night
Faces and black shadows with illuminating light
The lone house stood, unoccupied – or so it seems
Covered with powdered dust and sparkling web strings
The full moon summoned, the celestial divine
Yet the creatures lurk, standing in a line
On top of the hill, the magnificent house stood still
Beckoning the monsters to come at their will
The leaves rustled, the chimes slowly danced
Sharp and tingling melody enticed them in a trance
Goosebumps and tremors are creeping in slowly
As the narrowed door creaked opened wholly
A gust of wind swirled and formed into a figure
And screams were heard in silent rupture
At daybreak, the smell of something rotten
Permeated through, the candies forgotten
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[saajuk]

Trying to decide between "The Mask" and "Hallow Night". I know nothing bout poems or anything like that but Hallow Night was written a bit better imo and it painted a rather creepy picture in my head.

 

[phantasmor]

whoa i agree Halloween night is the best I'm saving that one to read every day of October every year

 

[Demonata]

Hallow Night was quit lovely. IT was a nice read, good job writing it.

 

[blakstang98]

It was a tough call between Untitled and Hollow Night for me. I went with Untitled because it had a pretty cool story to it. Both of them were well written, but Untitled got the nod from me.

 

[Takaiki]

WTF Rhyme schemes people.
There were only 2 poems who had a good rhyme scheme. I ended up deciding on the last one. For those of you who neglected their rhyme schemes, shame on you.

 

[Six]

Untitled did it for me. xD Love how it told a story about the 5 kids and how it related to Halloween very well. Love it. xD

 

[CassinoChips]

WTF Rhyme schemes people.
There were only 2 poems who had a good rhyme scheme. I ended up deciding on the last one. For those of you who neglected their rhyme schemes, shame on you.

The best poetry, in my opinion, does not rhyme. AABB and ABAB get repetitive unless they're very, very clever.

On that note, I liked The Mask. The short lines combined with the lack of punctuation gave it a quick, almost frenetic pace that worked well with the imagery.

 

[Mitsuki]

WTF Rhyme schemes people.
There were only 2 poems who had a good rhyme scheme. I ended up deciding on the last one. For those of you who neglected their rhyme schemes, shame on you.

Uh, there's nothing wrong with poems not rhyming. In fact I can actually appreciate poems that don't rhyme the best in terms of making it flow despite the lack of rhyming.

But anyway, "Monsters" and "Fall Children" really stood out to me. "Monsters" had a deeper meaning and I really liked that...I can really see what the writer intended here. "Fall Children" is the only poem that depicted a more positive and light-hearted note, which is good. "Untitled" has an interesting story...really kept you glued to it. "The Mask" is also very well writeen. But in the end I vote for Fall Children mostly because I can really see the spirit of Halloween described in a way that makes me look forward to it.

 

[phantasmor]

"monsters" just does not do it for me but..... it is well written and flows good and "Fall Children" IS light hearted and all but that last one, "Hallow Night" really does it for me, i hope i'm allowed to post twice here

 

[Kandy-Sugar]

Fall Children and Hallow Night stood out the most to me.

Though I went with Hallow Night. I think it flowed a bit better in my own opinion and it was very descriptive and kinda creepy which is what Halloween is all about isn't it. =P

The title definitely suited it and overall it was lovely. =)

Great work to everyone else!

 

[Gingerbread Lesbian]

Congrats to Mitsuki for winning with your poem Hollow Night. Fantastic poems all around and keep up the good work submitting them guys