Poetry F**k off world

[Jimmy D]

As I woke and look around,
All these problems I have found,
Build up and up and up,
Till they make me hit the ground,
Then I see the ones I love,
Argue about me, whisper about me,
Talk about every problem I see

F**k off world
What made you stay?
Take all your people
Get the f**k away
F**k off world
You like tears in my eyes?
I'll be there standing over you
Laughing when you fall and cry

Look at this now how it's become,
You feel it's my fault for what i've done?
Then f**k off and die in your hole,
I am the man who broke the mold.
My feelings dont seem to matter,
The feelings of my loved ones scatter,
No need to feel fear and dread,
Coz you're right infront of me,
I'll put a bullet in your head.

Now all your troubles are over....

F**k off world
What made you stay?
Take all your people
Get the f**k away
F**k off world
You like tears in my eyes?
I'll be there standing over you
Laughing when you burn and die

 

[LT_YO]

i wonder what the stars are doing in the middle of some of the words anyway you seem to be in an aggresive mood oh well im not one to judge

 

[Big Casino]

it may be agressive but i think its good

 

[LT_YO]

i didnt say it was bad i just said it was aggressive but your right it is good

 

[SapphireStar]

i wonder what the stars are doing in the middle of some of the words

Its because swearing is agaisnt the rules here, so Jimmy D was censoring them with stars. Its done alot.

Another great piece Jimmy, take it this is about Owen?

 

[Jimmy D]

No, it was a while ago when I had some trouble. Some of my best friends deserted me and I felt alone and for those few hours I hated everything.

 

[SapphireStar]

Ah, been there and done that myself. Happened start of this year, but I went into depressed little Lauren mode and just sulked for weeks!

Still, great piece of agressive work.

 

[Jimmy D]

Thank you very much all for you compliments

 

[LT_YO]

Its because swearing is agaisnt the rules here, so Jimmy D was censoring them with stars. Its done alot.

Another great piece Jimmy, take it this is about Owen?

i was being sarcastic but its good to see your on board

 

[The Guv'na]

This poem is pretty nice. Honestly, usually, I only notice how well the words rhyme.

 

[Lilly]

how sad but i under stand you really i want you to as your local new paper about getting it printed!

 

[SapphireStar]

I doubt the newspaper would print something they would label as depressing and aggressive.

 

[WiL Des Gardius]

Here comes my constructive comments, I'm sorry I cant help it, I am a Vocalist and Song Writer.
Overall its a great piece of writting, but the repetion of Fxxck off world kinda doesnt fit, it sounds great without those lines, just some advice