Original [Discussion] Elementia Chronicles

[Abstract Debauchery]

Discussion for my new, original story, Elementia Chronicles. The story can be found here:http://www.finalfantasyforums.net/original-works/story-elementia-chronicles-45483.html#post858726

It's a contemporary fantasy that dabbles heavily in steampunk. As I update it (which I will try to do twice a month, or once a week, depending on the demand for it), you'll see more and more of the setting. I plan on having it very unique.

The story takes place in a world, not so much different than our own, where lots of races exist. Things such as cell phones, airships, swords, and magic are very common. I'm wanting to blend the best of Contemporary Fantasy with Tradition Fantasy, while setting everything in a Steampunk world... If that makes any sense at all.

I know the prologue was short, but I do plan on having the rest of the chapters after this to be rather... Long. Very long. Like Wren and Sins of the Past (two of my short stories) combined long, if not longer. I'm talking 15 pages fucking long. (Which is why I say that I'm updating twice a month. )

I do hope you enjoy it. Please discuss everything here. Also, if you would like to create a character for my story, I don't mind. (Because I'm shit at thinking up names.)

 

[Gaige]

Interesting prologue. I did like the subtle description of combat, as well as the dry wit surrounding the Elementia characters you introduced. Good start. I want more.

 

[Abstract Debauchery]

You'll get more.

I am somewhat disappointed that I made it so short, but I kind of had to. If I didn't hurry up and write something, I only would have put it off again. Now that I have it up, I can force myself to work with what a wrote, and not change everything up in my head and give me even more excuse to not work.

I want a huge, and colorful cast of characters as well. Though, I already know for my next chapter, I'm going to have to find a way to explain how everything works while in the context of the story.

 

[Demon]

The girl was helpless to the Orcs. However I think it would be funny if you add another female of the same race that can completely dominate the Orcs. She can chase them off with bow and arrow and be like "Go away! No Orc is man enough for me!"

Good writings.