Poetry 3 of the poems that mean the most to me

[Sexy Beast]

Undecided, Untold, Feelings
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Ok I get it I waited too long
U got tired of me
I didn’t fulfill ur desires
U moved on
How can I do this to u ur wondering
I don’t know myself
U made me feel special
I made u feel warm inside
What were u feeling
How can I find out
The only question im wondering
Is………….
How do u feel about me now???
My Feelings
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I dream of you
I wish you were here
My feelings for you are growing with each passing day
I want to get to know you inside and out
I want to know what you feel
I want to know How you feel about me
If you feel the same way that I feel about you then,
Our hearts should be able to synchronize with each other
We will be able to connect physically, mentally and socially
I need to hold you in my arms, feel you, and love you with all my heart

 

[Dark-Angel]

theres only 2 there xD

Nevertheless...they have feeling in them. Thats a must if you write poetry. You can tell which poetrists or lyricists dont have meaning in them...just for the sake of it i'm gonna say Sum 41 just because they made "I wanna fuck a dog in the ass" Funny but not true poetry

I think you just need to word it right and try and watch out for saying stuff like "I, me you" to much. Reptition in poetry isn't a good thing exactly

Ehm how about like


I waited too long
U got tired of me
I did not fulfill ur desires
you were all i could see
How can I do this, you wonder

Even I don’t know
U made me feel warm
Did you feel the same?
This emotional storm
On how you feel...

How can I find out?
Just how?
My question...
How do u feel about me now?

(I'm not sure as to how the rythm goes, such as 2 verses of 7 stanza's, or what not. I think i added a line and deleted one, and changes the words around with some i think

Anywayz, keep going. They're good. it rare to see someone who actual has feeling in his poems