Poetry Our World

Dark-Angel

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Our World


In these desolate wastes
I stand alone
All is dead around me
Nothing but sand, hay and bone

In this darkness
I sit and think of where to go
Where to wander
Where to rid this woe

Under this azure sky
I see nothing but pain
This planet in ruin
Mankind is naught but a bane

I watch the tears
Trickle from the pure hearted
See their fear and anguish
For the love of their departed

Giggles and laughter are no longer heard,
For a mother and father mourn
outside the coffin
of their newborn

Bullets whistle in air
And slam into its target
He falls
And his killer has no regret

Screams are to be heard
As the fire licks their skin
And they cant escape
As they die from within

A man walks, scared
Before he is slashed,
Scarred, wounded
Beaten and smashed

I look back with watery eyes
To what only i can truly see
This chaos and destruction
This misery

No one has love anymore
Just anger and hate
When did it become like this?
When did it become this state?

I spread my wings
Pure and white
I look up
And I take flight

I no longer wish
To be here anymore
I 'm coming home
Away from this war
 
Yay first comment! :D

It's really good, I like it, a bit of a depressing subject but it's good, keep up the good work ^_^
 
I thoroughly enjoyed it, the short, sharp sentences made the poem really effective on the whole. It also has enough imagery in it to keep the poem interesting and letting it flow.
Great work ^_^
 
Yes...a war of emotions. Plus i'm sick of seeing in the papers all these bad things. All these bad emotions that people use. Why cant people have a bit of peace?
 
I'm going to have to agree. I liked your writing style a lot, and I like that the style is out of my range. I don't write in that rhyme scheme so seeing someone else's is a nice break, that really allows me to read what you're writing.
 
yeah i know what you mean. That the writing style i prefer, i dont really tend to move away from that style. Its weird xD
 
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