Poetry This is the End

[kaki tori]

This is the END

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What a piece of work is man
the reality of trying to live
the future is full
of clones and cannibals​

city to city
lives that tragically crossed
the bare bones
unleash coyotes​

fight in the works
too much trade shots
body language is loud and clear
hell may be next​

it never gets loud
error kept secret
baffles police
man convicted
big boys don't cry​

the way the world
test our will
amid chaos
changing power
shapes a new world​

light shines
on dark ages
it's the final countdown
big step forward
gears up to save
future today
idiot will lose
trust your own judgement
the silent ENDS​

Game Over​

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wrote this for my english class. i don't usually write like this, i was sick.
anyway what do you guys think? lets see if message got through to you.​

 

[Aerius Sygale]

Sorry, but I found the words to be a bit confusing...I couldn't really understand much from it with parts like

"lives that tragically crossed
the bare bones
unleash coyotes"

Well, tbh the whole thing kinda seems like that. I'd like to have a positive comment, but really, I'm kind of speechless, from what I can make out it sounds doom and gloomy. >.>

 

[kaki tori]

yeah the ordering needs alittle work as well as the stanzas. wrote it when i was sick so of course it turned out this way. its suppose to be doom and gloomy. my poem is a warning to society.

My poem at first glance its topic seems to be doom’s day. But I am actually referring to today.We live in a world of chaos. The media decides everything we see. Many crimes stories go untold, is what I meant when I selected the phrases “ it never gets loud” and “ error kept secret”. Many of these crimes “baffle police”. We act like animals (unleash coyotes), attacking each other (too much trade shots and fight in the works). When I stated the line “ the future is full of clones and cannibals” I was referring to the state of humans. Many of us are not being original, we don’t think with our minds but follow orders instead, and we “eat each other”. The world we live in is a survival of the fittest. If we continue done this path the world will be lost. The chaos “shapes a new world”, for the better or worse, it is up to us to decide. “Big step forward gears up to save future today”. In order to save our future we must learn to think on our own, “trust your own judgement “. If we continue to be idiots we will be the ones to lose. This isn’t just some “GAME” but this is the future, our future.

 

[Aerius Sygale]

After clarifying what each of the messages mean, it's very true...mankind is ruining the planet, and bad people are causing bad things to happen to good people.

People do need to realize this, and people need to change accordingly, for the better, or who knows how much longer the Earth has with all of the brilliant "inventions", that are hurting the world. :/