Original The darkness of destira

[Dark Fantasy X]

Well this is my story that i have decided to make up, dunno if it will work though, the names etc may come from different anime, though the characters have been altered greatly. i think i will call it

The Darkness of Destria
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Prologue
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The battlefield was scorched and dark with ash, the corpses of bodies lay scattered around the field, and the smell of blood and rotting flesh hung heavy in the air. From within this place a figure emerged, carrying a sword with a black guard, hilt, handle, chain and blade. He wore black armor, covered by a black coat. He walked down the field and disappeared into the darkness. His last words were
“The wheels of time are in motion, soon it will come again, and darkness will once again descend upon this land… pitiful creatures they all are, they are waiting to be consumed by darkness, and so be it.”
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He disappeared into the night, leaving behind a single black feather, which was blown by the wind over the town of Adur, which shown in the moonlight. The clouds began to gather, and the darkness began to descend upon the destroyed battlefield and the world of Destria.

 

[xxskycrasher498xx]

keep goin

 

[Dark Fantasy X]

here is the first chapter to Destria, hope you like it, if you don't well that doesn't matter, this is just to those that read it


Chapter 1 – Adur
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Kamui suddenly woke up, breathing fast and shallow, his whole body was covered in sweat, his black eyes looking all around his room for something. After a while he finally was able to relax.
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“What is wrong with me?” He whispered to himself. He has been having these dreams for a while now. The same destroyed battlefield, the same man that disappears, and that same black sword that radiated with that suffocating energy.
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Kamui looked over the town of Adur, from his bedroom in the attic, over the blacksmiths shop. The moon shown brightly onto the town and into his bedroom. Kamui just sat there and stared at the moon.
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“Heaven’s gate, the white angel will come, and with it the darkness will begin to descend,” he said quietly to himself, his eyes began to shine a bright yellow before it faded back to the blackness. “How the hell do I know that? It has to be that stupid dream that I keep having.” He rolled over and tried to get back to sleep all the while still thinking about what this heaven gate is.
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Kamui woke once again from that same dream, only this time the sun was shining down onto the town of Adur. He got up, dressed himself, and walked down from the attic to the kitchen downstairs. He saw his father already hammering away, like usual. This was their routine every morning. Kamui would help his father making from horse shoes to fine swords. But for some reason, Kamui could never make a sword to his liking. True his swords were better then his fathers, and true people paid plenty for them, but Kamui never seemed to like any of them.
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“Must be you have a keen eye for value Kamui,” his father had told him, “ that would mean that you are destined for greater things.” Kamui just laughed at the idea, he was only an average seventeen-year-old boy that didn’t look that strong but he was. Because of this, his family didn’t have to work as hard as they would have, so Kamui usually spent his time under the tree that looked over the town of Adur.
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That was where he was now, looking over the town, he found it peaceful, just to sit and watch, but today he was uneasy. True today the sun shown brightly, and true everything seemed calm, but he felt uneasy, even a bit scarred. Ever since he had begun to have those dreams, his swords began to improve, and yet he was still unhappy with them.
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Adur went about its usual businesses, and a girl named Asuka came to say hello.
“I thought I would find you here, Kamui.”
“Well where else would I be Asuka, I always spend my free time up here.”
“Well I guess you are right.” She climbed the tree and sat there looking over the town. “Seems like a peaceful day doesn’t it?”
“Seems that way, though I can’t help but feel something bad is going to happened.”
“Those dream again?”
“How did you guess?”
“What else could the problem be?”
“I guess I see your point,” Kamui stood up, “But yeah it is the dreams, and something I feel is on its way, I know it, see you around Asuka, I think something may happen tonight, I just don’t know what.”
“You know it will help if you actually knew what would happen, and not just all these guesses.”
“I suppose your right about that,” said Kamui, and he left the clearing and the tree.
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Asuka looked up to the clouds, “But yes Kamui, something is going to happen tonight, I feel it too ever since you told me about your dreams, something not good.” Asuka hoped down off the tree branches and left the clearing and ran after Kamui.

 

[Dark Fantasy X]

Here is chapter 2 dunno if its any good, just tell me what you think

Chapter 2 – Fallen Angel, Shirakun blade
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Kamui woke once again from that dream, the moon was once again shining down onto the town of Adur, and once again Kamui just sat there thinking over and over about that dream that he keeps having. “Heaven’s Gate,” he whispered, “What the hell is it?” He tried to roll over and fall back to sleep, but sleep wouldn’t come to him. After an hour, he finally sat back up, may as well work it off, he though. He walked down from the attic and down to the forge. He picked up his tools and began to hammer away at the blade, not really thinking what he was actually doing. This is what he did on nights like these, his father had already grown accustomed to this, and didn’t even stur, from his sleep, he didn’t notice Kamui.
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Kamui was still in the forge hammering, everything seemed normal, and no one was around to see his eyes. His eyes were already begun to glow yellow. Kamui wasn’t even aware that he was actually doing anything. He just kept hammering away at the blade, and slowly it took shape. The blade, the hilt, the guard, was there before Kamui. He engraved the word “Shirakun” onto the blade and placed a white stone he found long ago, onto the guard. He cried out “Wake Shirakun and destroy!”
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The sword grew white, and the whole thing erupted with white energy, the light shone upon Kamui through shadows all over the forge. The stone cracked and fell away to leave a blue crystal in its place, and the word ‘Shirakun’ disappeared to be replaced by a text that Kamui couldn’t read, but he somehow he knew it said Shirakun. The blade turned the purest of white; the guard of gold, and the handle was wrapped in black material. A gold chain hung from the end of the hilt, and at the end of the chain hung a letter ‘X’ in its place. Kamui’s eyes began to return to normal, and then he collapsed beside the sword.
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White’s red eyes looked around her cell. How long had she been locked away like this, waiting for someone to come along and take her? She didn’t know, but she knew that no one wanted her. She was an out cast angel from the society. Her White hair fell on her back, and the black clothes she wore were dirty from the days she spent in her cell, waiting, she knew that no one wanted her, she knew it deeply in her heart, that it pained her at night. So she decided long ago that when a chance came to escape from her prison, she would take it. The cell was locked with both magic and seals, so her magic or sword wouldn’t work.
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She sat there staring into the darkness of her cell. The walls were bare, and the cages just showed empty darkness, funny, she thought. That’s how I feel. The darkness seemed to be getting lighter, she though, but that can’t be right. The darkness began to disappear as a light orb took shape before her.
“What’s this?” she said out loud with shock. She reached out and touched it. It felt warm under her fingertips, and then she began to feel a pull on her hand and body. She finally decided to let the pull take her to where ever it would take her. She let it drag her away from this prison. Anything she decided was better then this place, which she was stuck in.
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Kamui’s eyes were closing, but a light was opening before him, and someone or something was coming through. So a new chapter opens to me, he thought, doesn’t matter now, I guess I may as well hope that the thing is friendly. That was his last thought before he blacked out.
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White appeared beside the Shirakun sword, she had a quick glimpse of the sword, and of the teenager beside it collapsed, before she too blacked out, and collapsed beside him.

 

[Dark Fantasy X]

Chapter 3 is here, and i changed Asuka's name to Aisha, so if you see that name in the future, it is actually Asuka

Chapter 3 – White
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White landed by the Shirakun sword, and collapsed there. She saw Kamui lying there, his hand spread out, collapsed and unconscious. She reached out, without thinking, held his hand before she also lost consciousness and blacked out.
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Kamui woke slowly, he lay there for a while, and just wondering why his bed was so hard, and why the hell did his head hurt so much. He slowly opened his eyes and, the first thing he saw was a pale hand, holding his own. Kamui sat up, surprised at the girl that has lying down beside him.
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He stood up and looked around the forge. He wasn’t really surprised, just wondered how the hell did he get there in the first place, not to mention the girl that was lying on the floor with white hair. He saw the sword, stuck in the ground and walked to it, pulled it out and examined it. It was the first sword that actually lived up to the standard that Kamui had set. It was the first one that actually pleased him and makes him happy to wield. Kamui just stood there staring at it, as in a daze, then it began to vibrate and glow, and it seemed that the crystal grew even brighter then it already was. It shown upon Kamui, and it felt as though it was trying to unlock something deep within him that he never knew about.
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The memories of the night before began to return, and how that sword came to be there and what he was doing there. The only thing that he didn’t know was what was that girl doing there. She appeared, to be around his age, or a year younger, defiantly not older.
“Hmm…” Kamui knelt down beside her, “I suppose I should at least wait until she wakes up.”
He looked out the window to the morning sun that was rising. It’s still early, he thought, I don’t think anyone is up yet. He bent down and picked up the girl, and the sword and walked in the direction of the hill that looked over Adur. He did this sometimes when he got up early, he would go to the hillside, and sits under the tree, and probably fall asleep there. His parents didn’t mind, they gave him his freedom because of what he has done for them. They knew he would come back when he wanted to. The sword he carried still troubled him though.
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It was an almost exact copy of the one that the man in his dreams carried, almost. The sword he carried was emitting white energy, the blade was a bit different as well as the runes, the jewel and the guard wasn’t the exact same, but it was similar, very similar. He laid the girl beside the tree, her white hair blowing in the wind. He looked at the sword.
“Shirakun is what I named you, or was it that you gave me that name?” he wondered “ I suppose it doesn’t matter, but why is it that I made you and why is it that you look similar to the one that I see in my dreams, does that one even exist?”
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The girl began to come round. Kamui looked up to her, and walked over to her. He knelt down beside her and looked at her face. Her red eyes were opening, that was something you don’t see everyday, he thought.
“You okay?” asked Kamui, nicely though.
“I think so, where am I?”
“Your only under a tree that looks over Adur, you sure you are okay, you don’t look it.”
“Yeah, thanks I’m White by the way.”
“Kamui, so why did you appear last night?”
“That doesn’t really matter that much, I’m a fallen angel that was exiled along time ago, it doesn’t matter anymore. Ever since my birth I was forsaken to what has happened to me.”
“Fallen angel?” This girl is reminding more and more of myself when I was like that.
“Yes, I don’t have anything so I merely exist, that is probably why I let myself go along time ago,” White stood up “I have nothing, and for that reason, I try to take everything, so I’m not the only thin that exists, it is kind of sad in a way, but that is what I am,” she raised her right hand “Appear, Angel’s light!” A sword made of crystal appeared in her right hand, it had text written along the blade, similar to the ones on Shirakun, “It says Heaven’s Light, I must apologies Kamui, I have to kill you, otherwise I don’t have anything, except my power, and what good is it if I don’t do anything with it?” She charged and struck.

 

[Dark Fantasy X]

Chapter 4 is out if you want to read it

Chapter 4 – Heaven’s Chain
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The sword was descending, Kamui saw her charge and come at him. He blocked the blow with Shirakun. He had be been practicing even though the swords were never up to his standard, at least be able to use it when the time came he decided. Sparks flew where the blades met, then he attacked her, aiming for her shoulder, but met her sword as well.
“White, why are you doing this, this doesn’t have a reason to it!” shouted Kamui as he blocked another blow to his shoulder.
“Do need an answer?” asked White as she dodged another sword stroke to her head. She jumped back from Kamui, “I never had a reason to do anything, that is why I became strong, and if I can’t use my power, what is the point of it?” Her red eyes began to glow, and white wings sprang from her back.
“So you are an angel, even the fallen ones have wings,” said Kamui. White flew up, and hovered above Kamui. “It seems that I can’t win,” Kamui looked down to Shirakun, “But then again I can do this now,”
“Do what exactly?”
“This,” Kamui said more to himself then anyone. His eyes began to glow yellow, and he could feel the energy in him as he began to lift of the ground. White was still hovering there looking at Kamui with an odd sort of interest, but she just flew at Kamui and struck. Kamui dodged the sword stroke, and flew back at White. Their swords met in the air, sparks were flying off where their swords had met.
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Kamui’s eyes were still yellow, but it seemed as if power began to radiate off his body, and into the sword. He felt the sword began to vibrate underneath his fingertips, his power was channeling down the blade. An odd white aura was starting to surround it.
Kamui was looking at White, and then to the sword, then he brought it down, at the same time firing a beam of energy at her.
“What the!” shouted Kamui and White. It was coming closer to White, she raised her sword and blocked it, but that didn’t stop her from being forced down to the earth.
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White rolled over in the crater that she had created; she just kept thinking what the hell was that? She could feel the blood coming up her throat, and coughed out blood. Coughing, she stuttered, “What the hell was that?” before she blacked out.
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Kamui saw White coughing up blood, not surprising, he thought, she did fall a long way. Kamui began to descend, how the hell did he do all that, fly and fire that blade beam at her? Kamui looked around, it was lucky that it was so early in the morning so that no one would have noticed them fighting. He landed beside White, and looked down on her.
“She really does remind me of how I was, and probably still am, maybe that is why I don’t want her to die,” whispered Kamui to himself, “Seems I was right I am different.” He picked her up and laid her once again beside the tree. Kamui looked at the Shirakun sword. “Heaven’s chain, how do I know what that thing was called let alone how the hell I did it?” whispered Kamui, “I suppose it doesn’t matter that much, I’m getting to worked up about this.”
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Kamui lay down beside White, under the shade of the tree, this could be the last time I lay here, if she decides to wake up and kill me, though I don’t think she would. Kamui’s eyes began to close and, exhausted from that battle, fell asleep.
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By the time Kamui woke up from that same dream, the sun had risen, and it was already the afternoon. He could see everyone doing his or her day-to-day things in Adur. He looked over his shoulder and though, Aisha should be coming soon, she always comes around this time. He saw White’s head had fallen onto his shoulder, still asleep. He carefully stood up, making sure not to wake her, and looked over the town.
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White began to stur, and Kamui looked over to her. He walked to her, and knelt down beside her.
“You okay?” he asked, nicely though.
“Yeah,” she replied, then in shock, “Wait! Didn’t I try to kill you, how come I’m not dead?”
“I don’t know why, truthfully, I just don’t want you to die, you kind of remind me of myself, a couple of years back. I was just like you, and I’m probably am, so we are kind of stuck in the same boat.”
“Oh, though that isn’t really a reason.”
“Seems that way.”
“Well this is a reason for you then, I was banished from the society, all because I was born. I have this odd power; it comes from that sword I wield. Everybody hates someone that has power, and is different. Isn’t it the same for you though?”
“I wouldn’t know, I only got it recently, and I didn’t even know about it till now, but even so, I wouldn’t want to kill people for the hell of it.”
“Is that so. I was treated worse then a slave, that’s probably when my resolve came, and I lost all meaning in the world. I just decided to do this, because there really isn’t anything I’m wanted for.”
“But still that isn’t a reason to live, just to live to kill?”
“I don’t have anything else,” replied White.
“Hmmm, if that is your logic, I’m not going to try and convince you not to, only that you consider this, you can come with me if you want to. I wouldn’t mind, if it can help you find a reason, maybe it would help me as well.”
“See what happens,” replied White.

 

[Dark Fantasy X]

Tell me what you think of Destira - chapter 5

Chapter 5 – White’s decision
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“Hey Kamui!” shouted Aisha from the field, “What happened here?” she pointed to the crater in the middle of the ground.
“I don’t know,” was his reply, “Probably lightning or something hit here.” Kamui stood up, lifting White to her feet at the same time.
“Who is the girl?”
“Her name is White, though that is all I know about her.”
White was behind Kamui, almost hiding herself, he though. He turned around to her, and whispered in her ear, “You okay, you seem a bit worried?”
“I’m fine, I just want to be by your side that’s all,” was her reply.
Kamui turned back to Aisha, “Truthfully I don’t know much about her, I only met her here, just before you came.”
“Is that all?” asked Aisha, almost teasing him, “Nothing else happened?”
“Nothing happened, Aisha,”
Aisha continued to stare at Kamui before she noticed the sword that was embodied in the ground. “Nice sword, you made it?”
“What? Oh, yeah, I made it last night, same old thing, woke up and couldn’t really get back to sleep, so I started to work it off, you know how it goes, it isn’t the first time that I was making things in the middle of the night.”
“Yeah that may be true, but nothing this good, you still not happy with your swords?”
“Actually I like this one, I’m thinking of keeping it.”
“To bad, probably would have sold for a good price if you think about it.”
“That would be true.”
“Doesn’t matter I guess, so how are your dreams, you said you made this in the middle of the night, same dream again?”
Dreams, thought White, what dreams could this girl are talking about. She looked at Kamui, wondering what exactly she meant by this.
“Unfortunately, I fell as though it’s coming closer and closer, as though it will actually happen one day.”
“Kamui they are only dreams, they can’t hurt anyone.”
“This one probably can.”
“Ummm… who are you?” asked White.
“Hmmm… oh sorry, I forgot to introduce myself to you, my name is Aisha, I’m a friend of Kamui ever since he arrived to this town.”
White stood closer to Kamui, holding on to him, as though he would disappear, and that girl would take her away.
“Kamui you know, I think she has taken a liking to you, and don’t worry I’m not going to be taking him away from you.”
“Hmmm… maybe, we still up for the festival next week?”
“What, oh yeah, you should bring her along, she might enjoy it, I should go back and get ready for it, and Kamui.”
“Yeah?”
“Keep that sword safe, I think people might just die for it, or do anything to get their hands on it, as you have decided it not for sale, people will want it.”
You don’t know half the story, he thought, but replied, “You’re probably right, though, I’m still not getting rid of it. It is the only sword to my liking.”
“And that is the reason that people will want it,” replied Aisha, she looked up at the sun, “I have to go back and help prepare for that festival, I’ll see you tomorrow Kamui, don’t do anything stupid to her,” said Aisha before she ran back to Adur.
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Kamui looked down to White, “Hey you sure you okay?” he asked.
“Yeah,” said White blushing a bit, she let go of Kamui’s arm.
“We should be getting back soon as well you know?”
“Actually I don’t really know, I told you I’m not from around here.”
“Fair enough.”
“Kamui what did she mean by dreams?”
“Oh that,”
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Kamui told White everything about what happened, and the dreams that he had been having recently, and the sword that he had made when she appeared. He told her everything that he had to tell, and in return, White told her about how she had got here, and about her prison and cell.
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Kamui and White left the hill, and went back to Adur. They got back to the forge, and they saw his father hammering away like usual. He turned around to see Kamui and a girl walk in through the door.
“Where have you been Kamui,” asked his father, though he wasn’t worried, he just thought it was natural to ask him where had he been when he went out for long periods of time, even though he knew he just went to the hill over Adur.
“You know where I was dad.”
“True, and who is the girl, and where did you get that sword Kamui?”
“The sword you probably can guess where it came from,” said Kamui, he pointed to White “Her name is White, I met her on the hill.”
“Okay, and you brought her home because?”
“She needs a place to stay,” Kamui replied simply.
“Okay, and where do you intend to let her to stay, you know that all the rooms have been taken.”
“Oh don’t worry about that, I’ll work something out,” said Kamui. He had been wanting to test his powers ever since he had fought with White in the morning, and he had thought of a way to do it. He led her up to the attic where he slept.
“White if you want to you can sleep here,” said Kamui.
“But what about you?”
“I’m thinking about sleeping on the roof, and if it’s raining,” his eyes turned yellow, just for a second, “I think I can work something around it.”
“Okay,” replied White, she climbed into the bed, and was soon falling asleep. Kamui looked at her from a distance, she must be happy he thought, he decided that she would have to go out tomorrow to get her some clothes, and not those robes that she was wearing now, they looked old especially with all that dust on them. He sighed and went out onto the roof, and was sleeping on a cushion of air, this way, he thought, he would be able to test his powers, especially since he would fly like this now, why couldn’t he spend the night like this? Eventually Kamui fell asleep outside the window of the attic, and beside White. His dreams were still of the same battle field and the same person with that sword except this time he heard him say
“The opening of Heaven’s Gate draw closer, then darkness will descent open Destria, and it will destroy all, the wheels of time are already in motion, It cannot be stopped now,” before he disappeared.

 

[KradDiher]

The idea is good, but I think you should break up some of the dialogue with description, like how they do it in novels.

You come with a descriptive part, a list of dialogue and then to the next descriptive part. Try to mix it a little .

But I like the idea.