Poetry My,um...'Cleris' poem.

GunbladeGirl

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*sigh* kinda nervous...haven't wrote anything in awhile...well,I came up with this Cloud and Aeris poem a month ago,I think.I was listening to some sad Chrono Cross music and it just came to me.Growing up,people told me I was a good writer.Well...I don't think I ever really was,looking back on it.

Well,anyway! Here it is:

The day you died,I felt like my soul had died with you.
My weakness overcame my strength,I wasn't able to save you.
Holding you,my arms shook with anger and despair.
My eyes,they filled with burning tears.
The way you smiled,the way you laughed.
When you looked at me,when you called my name.
Will I ever see or hear those things ever again?

Short,I know,but...yea,That's it.Please tell me what you think. :|
 
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That's actually quite good, quite deep. I like writing stuff like this too but mine wont go public.
 
It's pretty good. Simple and straight to the point, but it flowed well.

And I know what you mean by listening to Chrono Cross music. I get inspired easily too. xD

 
I really like it, it's simple sweet and really heartfelt ^_^

A+ for effort, and i'd love to see more from you :D
 
good stuff, im a supporter of clerith/is.

if you've got anything else, please dont hesitate to post it.
 
*sniffle* That was so beautiful,sweet,and adorable!I love it you did such an amazing job on that poem!I also give you an A+ ^_^
 
That was...deep and touching. I really like it. It's nice to see poems like that. I usually listen to piano music to get my inspiration for writing poems
 
Lone_Wolfy!!!!!
Lone Wolfy...huh. I like that. Thats going in my sig. lawl. but yeah. you do have talent. i'm writing one the now and its should be up by the end of the month. and yes it is a love themed one.

Yay...its half way done btw. But anyway i think i'll go throw fireballs at someone on the shoutbox and get called "Lone Wolfy"

Lone Wolfy
 
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