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Federico, Lorca

[Made due to my unusual Otaku-ness]
ORPG/URPG/RPB - ORPG/URPG/RPB

Name – Van Magus, Lorca
[Named after Federico Garcia Lorca the Spanish poet]

Title – Spellsword

Alignment – Nuetral

Race Human

Gender – Female

Age – 16 Years Old

Appearance
wpap200613350am.jpg


Lorca has a slight tan and athletic body build. She has notable wild pink hair. She seems to prefer a happy facial expression but her face is capable of a large variety to be easily portrayed due to the cheek bone ratios. She stands at about 5'4 and weighs about 100lbs.

Attire – She also wears a bikini-like top that covers a 777 tattoo on her chest and connects to a pair of shorts. wears blue arm warmers with white fur trim. Matching a dress-like sash that goes down in the back. Also wearing a set of leg straps and a belt with a skull buckle. She also wears a set of stringed sandals, black in color and, reach to her ankles.


Personality – Lorca is an intellectual. She is calm minded for the most part though when she is questioned she can easily be upset. When upset she is a different person and rather violent. She is known to be a frequent reader and does such read books including "Byron's Demon Dictionary" or the "Death Charter" series. These written by her favorite authors Byron and Mortalia Van Magus with a also her adopted parents. She has a habit of speaking in a foriegn language she calls spanish.

First Impression – She has an attitude that seems to make him appear friendly. She is the type that if asked "How are you doing?" he would reply "Bueno y tu?". And she gets along fine with friends. She does however have a mentionable temper and won't stand for insults.

Strength – Lorca is of average strength and isn't too frightening. She could hurt someone but most hits couldn't OHKO someone unless she is well aimed. She can break bones if he tried hard enough or even boards though.

90/500

Other Physical Abilities – Lorca is unimpressive in nearly every sense. She lacks great speed or endurance of others. She is at her best a really strong human with abilities that rank slightly above the typical human being. But other special fighters in many cases can easily overpower her. This is true for all aspects other than her defense.

Fighting Style – She is an in your face type of fighter. Her style shows experience but not much discipline. In reality she was taught this style by her father Byron Van Magus before he went missing. She is very acrobatic. And is mainly for evasion and defense. Up until she enters an offensive in which she continually shows aggression. Though for the most part it seems very honest she'll sneak in a trick and seems like a mix between a war vet and a street brawler.

Under her fathers training she has mastered the concept of going with the flow.

Weapons
Reina Hueso - [Bone Queen]
She is known to use a unique sword in her arsenal. It has a steel handle. The guard is shaped like a cross which slightly bent. The blade is typical silvery color with a yellow strip going down the middle. The blade is straight and is about 3ft long. Going down its sides are a collection of spikes.

Having such a close bond to its master it acts like a living thing and can regenerate like a living thing. But this is a lot faster taking about 30 seconds.

Armour – N/A

Abilities
Blindado [Armored]
This is Lorcas primary defensive skill. While in effect it gives her skin the strength of aluminum. This can be increased temporarily by pumping magical energy into the skin. The increase is dependent on the amount of energy used. Typically it is cheap to increase. Though the inner areas of the joint and typical soft spots always remain the same strength.

Gloton [Glutton]
This ability allows Lorca to absorb the energy of nearby surroundings. This skill was learned from her mother. This includes natural energy and souls. This energy is used to restore her own. When absorbing normal energy it would take about 6 Minutes to recover all her energy. When souls are involved she can absorb 10 to fully restore her energy. When performed the souls normally appear as spiritual orbs but can be seen in their original form if she pleases.

Comerse [Eat Up]
This allows her to eat a spirit with destroying it. This grabs the spirit and forces it into her belly. But this is in essence using her body as a seal. The spirits has no interaction with the outside world as well as her. But she can still speak telepathically to a spirit. This consumes the spirit regardless of their will. When performed a black square tattoo appears on her tongue. When performed the souls can be seen in their original form. After being eaten a spirit cannot pass on or in someway be removed from this world. If a spirit is released under certain conditions it will return forcibly on its own.

Magic
Unamed
This simply allows her to summon a specific spirit of her choosing. This skill is cheap and efficient. She may choose the type, element, class or rating of said spirit. She also possesses the ability to select spirits with the ideal abilities she may need.

Medio Espiritual [Spiritual Medium]
This is neither a holy or evil skill and is unaffiliated with either force in anyway. This skill allows her to channel a spirit through a medium of her choice. This can be done in three ways and each has their ups and downs. When channeling she gains a power related to her spirit in some way. These include:
--Nature Mediums
A nature medium is the easiest to perform medium. It in most cases in the most useful as well. She will bind the spirit with something of nature. This can be any element. Including fire, lightning or more solid things like water, earth and even at times the air around her if need be.
--Weapons Mediums
A weapon medium allows her to gain a power related to a weapon. This is because she directly integrates the souls with some item or weapon of her choice. This compresses the power to the item. Thus this can be a bit tricky to perform based on th spirit. This can be performed with a living thing so long at it's dead.
---Human Medium
This allows her to directly compress the medium in a special way. It compresses it in the confines of her whole body. This is basically a controlled possession. This is the hardest to perform. Though it can be easy with low level spirits it isn't always that way.


------Spirit Guide------[
C Class
These are lowest level spirits. Most often made from a glimmer of energy or a really vague memory of something unimportant.
B Class
These are normal spirits. Either people who have just died or animals ETC. These can be item spirits after a few hundred years.
A Class
These are a class of powerful beings. Many being humans or animals after hundreds of years. Some of these spirits were revered as demons, angels, and even low level gods. Though not the strongest beings of existence they are powerful and to be revered.
S Class
These are the most powerful things to ever touch the planet. They are often revered as the highest level of gods amongst living beings. Some have been said to origins of life.

Other Skills
Igual [Equal]
Her body is boosted in strength based on what spirits she is using. Meaning that with the usage of multiple spirits this effect is added up.
---C Class
Her body receives a bonus equal to being slightly above human.
---B Class
Her body receives a bonus equal to being above human.
---A Class
Her body recieves a bonus equal to powerful demons.
---S Class
Her body receives a miraculous bonus far beyond the scope of most people.


History – Due to her Foster-Mothers unwanting of bearing children yet wish for an acquaintance, Lorca was adopted. Lorca originally only wanted a mother while she didn't get one at first. He Foster-Mother originally just wanted someone to pass down the dark arts to. She was trained day and night and by the age of 12 found her specialty in the dark arts. She was always a lonely child before her adoption so spirit communication and merger seemed to fit rather well. She would use this skill to befriend spirits.

He connection to the spirits grew so high she could summon God-Class spirits at the age of 12 years old. She learned to befriend spirits rather well and could talk her way into aquantaincship with no difficulty. She displayed the ability to calm any spirit she came across and if they wished to do her harm at the age of 13 could command them to stop. A spiritual command so strong they lacked the strength to do otherwise.

She later became close to her knew Mother. The two spent lots of time together and played a lot. She had gotten her wish, a loving mother and an infinite amount of spirit friends. This however caused her to be horrified when she was forced to learn how to eat spirits. She had no problem eating animal spirits seeing as how they served the purpose of being spirit food anyways in many cases, but when she was forced to eat human spirits she left home. She now travel the world sparingly seeing her mother here and there, along with the main goal of finding her father Byron whom she always had a close bond to. All in hopes of returning his memory to him.
 
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Can you merge this with my other RPC VanMagus, Byron? Thanks... And also I am not keeping Lorca... Not as he is now.
 
Sorry for the delay, you have been waiting for a while.
I have been busy with many things, alongside a "meh-phase' sadly..

'ere we go at least!

[Made due to my unusual Otaku-ness]
ORPG/URPG/RPB - ORPG/URPG/RPB
RPB as well, eh, then expect a more detailed nagging ^^
Name – Van Magus, Lorca
[Named after Federico Garcia Lorca the Spanish poet]

Title – Spellsword

Alignment – Nuetral

Race Human
Hahaha
I saw one detail the race of man, but I dotn think I ever saw a wiki link to the race ^^
Well, it is epically detailed though not "your work" ^^
Gender – Female

Age – 16 Years Old
Note that age comes to play for physical and mental things later on.
Appearance
wpap200613350am.jpg


Lorca has a slight tan and athletic body build. She has notable wild pink hair. She seems to prefer a happy facial expression but her face is capable of a large variety to be easily portrayed due to the cheek bone ratios. She stands at about 5'4 and weighs about 100lbs.
You only mention the hair color, what about the length and shape?
Her eyes are not mentioned.
her 'build' is not stated, even though one cna guess off the height/weight, it should be stated. "athletic" is not enough ^^
Scars? marks? (like the tatoo you mention in attire) etc should also be stated here.
Attire – She also wears a bikini-like top that covers a 777 tattoo on her chest and connects to a pair of shorts. wears blue arm warmers with white fur trim. Matching a dress-like sash that goes down in the back. Also wearing a set of leg straps and a belt with a skull buckle. She also wears a set of stringed sandals, black in color and, reach to her ankles.
You are aware that this attire is NOT very good using in battle, right?
Using the image as guide her breasts will fall out of the bikini when she does anything athletic.
What is everything made of.
Also, you are not mentioning her ear-crap and her choker,
Personality – Lorca is an intellectual. She is calm minded for the most part though when she is questioned she can easily be upset. When upset she is a different person and rather violent. She is known to be a frequent reader and does such read books including "Byron's Demon Dictionary" or the "Death Charter" series. These written by her favorite authors Byron and Mortalia Van Magus with a also her adopted parents. She has a habit of speaking in a foriegn language she calls spanish.
I just underlined something here, this is a nice thing to have, yes, but it does not explain much about her personality.
As I have stated in the extra detailing of he character bio format, answer the following questions for more detail.
Personality
Answer these questions in your description and it should help a lot.
-How is your character around friends?
-How is you character if alone and bored?
-How is he if insulted by someone larger than himself?
-if someone accidentally trips and spills a mug of water on you char, but apologizes after, how does your char react?
-What look does your char have on the following:
|-Killing the innocent.
|-Killing evildoers (bandits and the like).
|-Killing in self defense regardless on the person.
That should help a little.
First Impression – She has an attitude that seems to make him appear friendly. She is the type that if asked "How are you doing?" he would reply "Bueno y tu?". And she gets along fine with friends. She does however have a mentionable temper and won't stand for insults.
The pinkish colored word might be a typo ^^
The underlined sentence fits more in your personality tab
I again point to the character detailing.
First Impression
Note that the first impression is made upon first glance, you should state here what a different person (character) might notice when seeing you for the first time.
Add how he will react if approached and randomly talked to.
Strength – Lorca is of average strength and isn't too frightening. She could hurt someone but most hits couldn't OHKO someone unless she is well aimed. She can break bones if he tried hard enough or even boards though.

90/500
just so you know, 90/500 is quite strong.
To follow with your detailing, I would estimate around 50-55/500
Other Physical Abilities – Lorca is unimpressive in nearly every sense. She lacks great speed or endurance of others. She is at her best a really strong human with abilities that rank slightly above the typical human being. But other special fighters in many cases can easily overpower her. This is true for all aspects other than her defense.
Yeah, because her 'armor' is so very protective ^^
Lacking great speed does not help for her defence, but note that I have yet to read the rest of the bio, so things might be explained there. ^^
Fighting Style – She is an in your face type of fighter. Her style shows experience but not much discipline. In reality she was taught this style by her father Byron Van Magus before he went missing. She is very acrobatic. And is mainly for evasion and defense. Up until she enters an offensive in which she continually shows aggression. Though for the most part it seems very honest she'll sneak in a trick and seems like a mix between a war vet and a street brawler.

Under her fathers training she has mastered the concept of going with the flow.
When using her you must be aware of the lack of her strength and speed.
Weapons
Reina Hueso - [Bone Queen]
She is known to use a unique sword in her arsenal. It has a steel handle. The guard is shaped like a cross which slightly bent. The blade is typical silvery color with a yellow strip going down the middle. The blade is straight and is about 3ft long. Going down its sides are a collection of spikes.

Having such a close bond to its master it acts like a living thing and can regenerate like a living thing. But this is a lot faster taking about 30 seconds.
An example might be good here.
So, if another character manage to "cut" your sword in half, it will regenerate the cut off part?
What happens to the loose part? Can that be used to fabricate new weapons? That is overpowered since you can then make unlimited weapons ^^
So, make any cut off parts "go poof" or something. And detail the regenerative power more, where does it get the energy, does it need a recharge time after a regenerative action is done?
Just how bad does it have to be for it not to be able to regenerate, or be in the need of ecternal help-
Armour – N/A

Abilities
Blindado [Armored]
This is Lorcas primary defensive skill. While in effect it gives her skin the strength of aluminum. This can be increased temporarily by pumping magical energy into the skin. The increase is dependent on the amount of energy used. Typically it is cheap to increase. Though the inner areas of the joint and typical soft spots always remain the same strength.
Since it is your SKIN that gets the property of aluminum, be aware that you detailed it as if you had a 1mm thick aluminum armor, which is easily cut through with a folded steel sword, not to mention that it bends rather easily. For your sake I would recommend titanium, it is still light but WAY stronger.
You need to state energy drain, how long it can be active, examples of what damage it CAn and CANNOT withstand.
Gloton [Glutton]
This ability allows Lorca to absorb the energy of nearby surroundings. This skill was learned from her mother. This includes natural energy and souls. This energy is used to restore her own. When absorbing normal energy it would take about 6 Minutes to recover all her energy. When souls are involved she can absorb 10 to fully restore her energy. When performed the souls normally appear as spiritual orbs but can be seen in their original form if she pleases.
Be sure to detail that you do not absorb energy from other characters, as that is g'modding ^^
Since this skill absorbs energy, its drain is naturally extremely low, but should still be mentioned due to if she is interrupted.
Also, wont the "quality" of the soul determine the energy gain?
I mean, a warrior type soul might be worth less energy than a mage type, considering their style of life.
Comerse [Eat Up]
This allows her to eat a spirit with destroying it. This grabs the spirit and forces it into her belly. But this is in essence using her body as a seal. The spirits has no interaction with the outside world as well as her. But she can still speak telepathically to a spirit. This consumes the spirit regardless of their will. When performed a black square tattoo appears on her tongue. When performed the souls can be seen in their original form. After being eaten a spirit cannot pass on or in someway be removed from this world. If a spirit is released under certain conditions it will return forcibly on its own.
You should firstly mention that this is somehow avoidable to other characters.
It needs more detailing to HOW it works, and perhaps why it works.
Add an energy drain and a way to avoid it.
Magic
Unamed
This simply allows her to summon a specific spirit of her choosing. This skill is cheap and efficient. She may choose the type, element, class or rating of said spirit. She also possesses the ability to select spirits with the ideal abilities she may need.
So, she summons a ghost that cannot interact with this world?
Detail it more please.
Medio Espiritual [Spiritual Medium]
This is neither a holy or evil skill and is unaffiliated with either force in anyway. This skill allows her to channel a spirit through a medium of her choice. This can be done in three ways and each has their ups and downs. When channeling she gains a power related to her spirit in some way. These include:
--Nature Mediums
A nature medium is the easiest to perform medium. It in most cases in the most useful as well. She will bind the spirit with something of nature. This can be any element. Including fire, lightning or more solid things like water, earth and even at times the air around her if need be.
--Weapons Mediums
A weapon medium allows her to gain a power related to a weapon. This is because she directly integrates the souls with some item or weapon of her choice. This compresses the power to the item. Thus this can be a bit tricky to perform based on th spirit. This can be performed with a living thing so long at it's dead.
---Human Medium
This allows her to directly compress the medium in a special way. It compresses it in the confines of her whole body. This is basically a controlled possession. This is the hardest to perform. Though it can be easy with low level spirits it isn't always that way.
------Spirit Guide------[
C Class
These are lowest level spirits. Most often made from a glimmer of energy or a really vague memory of something unimportant.
B Class
These are normal spirits. Either people who have just died or animals ETC. These can be item spirits after a few hundred years.
A Class
These are a class of powerful beings. Many being humans or animals after hundreds of years. Some of these spirits were revered as demons, angels, and even low level gods. Though not the strongest beings of existence they are powerful and to be revered.
S Class
These are the most powerful things to ever touch the planet. They are often revered as the highest level of gods amongst living beings. Some have been said to origins of life.
This skill has to be way more detailed, it should come with an example for every element, item and body you stated.
You must have an energy drain for things.
Also, Since a god is basically a spirit already, I dont think you should be able to summon one ^^
Other Skills
Igual [Equal]
Her body is boosted in strength based on what spirits she is using. Meaning that with the usage of multiple spirits this effect is added up.
---C Class
Her body receives a bonus equal to being slightly above human.
---B Class
Her body receives a bonus equal to being above human.
---A Class
Her body recieves a bonus equal to powerful demons.
---S Class
Her body receives a miraculous bonus far beyond the scope of most people.
As everything, detail needs more exampling.
History – Due to her Foster-Mothers unwanting of bearing children yet wish for an acquaintance, Lorca was adopted. Lorca originally only wanted a mother while she didn't get one at first. He Foster-Mother originally just wanted someone to pass down the dark arts to. She was trained day and night and by the age of 12 found her specialty in the dark arts. She was always a lonely child before her adoption so spirit communication and merger seemed to fit rather well. She would use this skill to befriend spirits.

He connection to the spirits grew so high she could summon God-Class spirits at the age of 12 years old. She learned to befriend spirits rather well and could talk her way into aquantaincship with no difficulty. She displayed the ability to calm any spirit she came across and if they wished to do her harm at the age of 13 could command them to stop. A spiritual command so strong they lacked the strength to do otherwise.

She later became close to her knew Mother. The two spent lots of time together and played a lot. She had gotten her wish, a loving mother and an infinite amount of spirit friends. This however caused her to be horrified when she was forced to learn how to eat spirits. She had no problem eating animal spirits seeing as how they served the purpose of being spirit food anyways in many cases, but when she was forced to eat human spirits she left home. She now travel the world sparingly seeing her mother here and there, along with the main goal of finding her father Byron whom she always had a close bond to. All in hopes of returning his memory to him.
-As normally, I dont read the history when nagging-

Your soul thing should be detailed way more.
So that you dont just go and summon a perfect soul to the situation you should list the kinds of souls you have available, and since this will be used in RPB's you should add some sense of randomness in it so that you don't just so happen to be able to summon an S-class in a RPB.
I say use a dice or something, a D20 seems to be well usable here.
((Dont have a die? use this site.))

You lack a ton of detail, I urge you to read the 3rd post of the Bio Format topic and follow what I have stated for you in the different tabs.

So, for now this character is [Not Approved]

EDIT
I just realized that you dont have the endurance tab, you have to add that for the next edit.
 
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