Original Distances Apart

[Dark-Angel]

Distances Apart


A new chapter has begun
One better than before
The new person i haven't stopped
To love more and more

Once more I was lonely
Loveless yet free
Now in love with someone
And once again I am me

Fate's cruel twist
Leaves us stranded
Apart from each other
And abondoned

When i see hold you the first time
That first hug...
Between out warmth
Together we are stuck

When i see you the first time
That first tender kiss
From your trembling lips
Would be my only wish

Through fire and thunder
I will go through
Anything if it means
I get to see you

Time travels slowly
Without you in my arms here
Because you're the one reason
Why i'll never shed a tear

I want to see you each day
I want you to me mine
I want me to be your's
From now till end of time

I will wait forever
Would you wait too?
This promise
I swear I will keep true

I wait here, unable to move
Whilst thinking of you with all my heart
It kills me inside,
This waiting, these distances apart

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Ok appreciation is appreciated but i what i really want is advice on how to improve this. I want it as best as possible for that "someone"

The story behind this one is, this girl i met randomly over msn and we have soooooooo much in common and we like eahc other and we connect etc etc blah blah, and we so badly want to see each other coz she lives like 400 miles away

 

[Sexy Beast]

Wow its really great n o improvements here hey why not check out my newest thread.

http://www.finalfantasyforums.net/writers-boulevard/all-of-my-poems-22910.html

hope ya enjoy it

and again great job its a awesome poem keep up the great work.