Original Ceon's story.

mill3r91

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There was once a village, so holy that they had there own warrior military protecting it. One warrior stood out from the others; fierce, strong and deticated. This warrior was Ceon. The village was doing fine until the village leader refused to partake in an annual prayer to the Mysterious Forces. Because he didn't participate in this prayer, the Dark Forces sent a plague to the city. They fought a long war against the plague and the plague could not win with Ceon directing the army. So the Dark Forces tricked Ceon into thinking the Dark Forces were the Mysterious Forces. (incase you're confused, the Mysterious Forces are the good forces, and the Dark are the bad. The Dark Forces destroy things when things are not done properly.)

So Ceon listened to the Dark Forces and killed the village leader. With the leader gone and Ceon by their side, the Dark Forces took over the city and destroyed it. When Ceon saw this, he was shocked at what he had done and fled. He ran until he couldn't, and then passed out in the dessert. He had a dream that night, that he was walking up to the village leader he had killed. His back turned to Ceon, he then shot up to the sky. A giant creature came down and almost killed Ceon in his dream. A large golden blade then fell from the sky and landed in his hand. It had a large key-like tip. Ceon killed the creature. As he awoke, he found the blade in his hand. The Mysterious Forces then talked to him. They told him what had happened, and what he needed to do.

The blade was the Sacrifice Keyblade. He had to kill a living thing everyday to keep going. If he didn't do this him and the keyblade would be destroyed. The blade was made on accident, and if it were ever destroyed (which is impossible unless the daily-sacrifice didn't happen) the world would end. He then met a warrior names Typhon, a dragon slayer. Typhon gave him a magical shield that blocked all magic. Then gave him his old armor. This armor made so that all the damage he took reduced it by 75%. So Ceon went from town to town, killing evil fiends for sacrifices. Saving many towns, he searched for the Dark Forces, to get revenge. One night he totally forgot about the sacrifice and made a noble choice to sacrifice himself for the sake of the world living on. The Mysterious Forces granted him his life back, telling him they did it for his noble deed, but could not do it again. With that in mind, he set out to find his old village.

Traveling the dessert, he came across his old village, only in ruins. As devistating as it was, he knew it was cause of him that the village was like this. He saw a few dark fiends running to him. As he slashed threw the fiends, he realized these were no ordinary fiends, but those of ones dispatched by the Dark Forces. He knew this was a sign of fright by the Forces, and that they weren't far from him. He was close to his goal. He kept walking, fighting more dark fiends. An old man stopped him and told him he was sent by the Mysterious Forces. He explained how to use the Keyblade to go into the Perlia Dimension; the dimension where the Mysterious and Dark Forces were located. Ceon stuck his blade out and unlocked an invisible pad lock to the other dimension. The Mysterious Forces then talked to Ceon. The Mysterious Forces told him that the Dark Forces were attacking the Mysterious Forces because the saving of Ceon. He then made his way to the Temple of Mysteries, where he would seek his ultimate revenge.

Fighting evil fiends, gross monsters and nasty creatures he continued to the temple. He thought to himself how he would defeat the Dark Forces all by himself. He then looked at his blade and shook the thoughts away. If anyone could do it, it was him. Then he thought to himself, keyword if. He knew these could only be thoughts from the Dark Forces. They were stalking him. He could see 2 people dressed in armor infront of him. One looked like a girl and the other a man. They each had a keyblade with them. The girl had one with a large fin like blade at the end and the other had a large gear on it. He spoke with them and they were searching to defend the Mysterious Forces and defeat the Dark Forces.

They all reached the temple. Fighting fiends, powerful fiends at that, the warriors were getting tired. Ceon then could see the village leader he killed that horrific day. He walked up to him, the leader then shot up into the air; just like in his dream. Ceon the ran away while he remembered the large monster that came from the sky. As expected, the monster came from the sky. As the two warriors were fighting off the fiends, Ceon went to battle the large monster. After intense fighting, Ceon the lodged the blade into the monster. Everything blew up. The battle was over. Regaining consiousness, he then started to get rubble off of him and removing boulders around him so he could get up. He obviously won the fight. He couldn't find his blade. He thought that it blew up but then remembered that if it got destroyed, the world would also. He then looked down and the sword was in his hand. He was ready to embark his new journey, to find the other two warriors who helped him in this battle.

He had no clue where they went, but one thing was for certain, he needed rest. He then dug a small hole and slept. As he awoke the next day, a brutal sandstorm stopped him in his path. It was no ordinary sandstorm, but one sent from magic. He stuck his shield out infront of him and made his way through the dessert. Someone was stopping him in his path. He then saw an old man's shadow far past the dessert. Running for the man, he stuck his blade out. The man disappeared and the sandstorm sub-sided. After walking a long time, he saw something that was not ordinary. Something, impossible.

He saw his old village. Not in ruins, not destroyed. As he walked through his village, people threw things, cursed, and spit on him. He was confused as to what was going on. He then thought to himself, this couldn't be my village. Mine is nothing but ruins. He saw an old man walking towards him. A man in armor then came out of the old man, like it was his spirit. The old man asked what he was doing there. Ceon told him about his village. The old man stated this was not his village and that if he didn't leave he would have trouble. Ceon needed a sacrifice anyways so he thought that he would just slay this old man in his way. The old man then disappeared as the armored spirit like warrior stepped forward. This would be one fight that was worth a thousand fights.

Ceon swung his blade and told the armored foe that he would be making a huge mistake. The foe laughed then swung his sword toward Ceon's. The foe had a keyblade, much like Ceon's, but it was black and had a big flame on the end. Ceon then realized that the old man who cast this guy was the one who told him how to use the keyblade to go to the Perlia Dimension. He had to think about this later. Right now, this foe was going down. Ceon jumped towards his enemy and sliced away. The enemy blocked and countered with a huge black blast. Ceon used to shield to block it and then swung at the enemy again. After countless minutes, almost an hour the two warriors were worn out. Ceon's foe fell the the ground. Ceon walked over to him. He stuck his blade by his neck. As he swung the blade towards his enemy he changed back to the old man. Without hesitation Ceon beheaded him and made his way threw the city.

People were to scared to move a muscle, as they saw what he did to their village leader. Ceon thought that he would never find the people who helped him that day. Only now did he find what he was searching for. He saw them both, heads in the hands of a giant beast. The beast broke the warriors heads off and threw them at Ceon. Ceon then began a fight with this monster. After about an hour of slicing, blocking, and dodging, the fight was over. Ceon killed this beast. It was the last Dark Force. he remembered he never left the Perlia Dimension. He was in it the whole time. The wizard, beasts and old man were all part of this lure.

With the Dark Forces officially gone, the Mysterious Forces granted Ceon a blessing. No longer did he wield the Sacrifice Keyblade, but he now possessed the Ultimate Keyblade. They gained enough power from the Dark Forces death to change the keyblade. But this wasn't the end for Ceon. He knew this was only the beginning. The beginning of the end. He needed to know the history about the Sacrifice Keyblade and the Ultimate Keyblade. The only way he could do this is by asking the Mysterious Forces. So he set foot once again to the Temple of Mysteries. He had no troubles getting there. Everything was calm, quiet.

As he set foot into the temple, the Forces voices spoke. They asked what he wanted. He asked about the history of this magnificent blade. The Forces replied, The Dark Forces usually never make keyblades. It's not there job. But this time they did. They wanted to create the ultimate keyblade. It was almost done. The power source was the spirit of the world. But the Dark Forces left out one final piece, they had to have a posseser in mind. So that ruined the blade. Then, when you killed the the Dark Forces it sent enough energy to us to change the blade. It is now indestructible, which makes it the Ultimate Keyblade. With the right attitude and guidance, you also are indestructible.

Ceon then asked about the 2 warriors who helped him in his first fight. The Forces no longer spoke. Only then did he realize he was on his own in this journey. He left the temple and then left the Perlia Dimension. He had no clue what to do next. He could then see 2 armored people far ahead of him. He began running towards them. The old man who he killed before appeared infront of him and stuck the black keyblade out infront of him. The armor stopped the blade from going through him. The old man was very surprised. Ceon asked who he was and he replied he was a messenger from the Dark Forces. Ceon then said the old man told him he was a messenger from the Mysterious Forces. The old man said he was until Ceon had killed the first Dark Force.

Ceon the killed the old man. After the dark fiend posessing the old man was killed, the old man told Ceon something. The old man said that there was still 1 more Dark Force. The last Dark Force was the weakest one, but the hardest to find. Ceon asked the old man where to find the last one. The old man replied, he is hidden in the Loca Dimension. The old man then died. Ceon stuck his keyblade out and unlocked the invisible pad-lock to the Loca Dimension. Ceon wondered why the Mysterious Forces didn't tell him about the last Dark Force.

The Loca Dimension looked like a futuristic town. People stared at Ceon as he made his way through the town. He asked someone where he could locate the Dark Force. The person just laughed and walked away. Ceon was then attacked by the two people who helped him in his battle against the first Dark Force. Ceon asked what they were doing but they just kept attacking. Ceon had only one option and it was to kill them. But they were not really them, they were dark fiends in disguise. The last Dark Force knew Ceon was looking for him. Ceon came across a small tower and went inside. The last Dark Force was laying on the ground. Ceon stuck his blade throughthe last Dark Force and killed him. Ceon then went back to his dimension to continue what he was doing. Saving city's and searching.
 
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I like the setup. It sounds very fantasy-ish and Im curious where the story will go. Keep working on it.

Btw, in the second sentence, you misspelled dedicated by writing "deticated".

And....you posted this in the wrong section, so I will move it for you to Writer's Boulevard. ^__^
 
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I like the setup. It sounds very fantasy-ish and Im curious where the story will go. Keep working on it.

Btw, in the second sentence, you misspelled dedicated by writing "deticated".

And....you opsted this in the wrong section, so I will move it for you to Writer's Boulevard. ^__^
thank you very much :)
 
Mmm...word of advice for future writing;

New idea = new paragraph.

If you are going to explain about an idea, then you make a new paragraph about it. It just makes it much easier to read. I lost interest around where you used parentheses due to the fact that it is one big huge chunk you're making me read.
 
i understand. thank you all who have helped me on this. it is finally done.
 
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