Poetry Bully, the Poem

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She thinks she is pretty,
But no she is not,
Because a good personality
She has not got,
She thinks she is better
Than Everyone else
But the truth is that she is just FOOLING HERSELF!
She takes out her anger
On people like you,
But don't be put down
She is jealous, it's true!
You are better than her,
So just be all smiles,:)
Then you'll beat her in life,
By a million miles.

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What do you think people?
 
Ooh quite good. It has a lot of truth and feeling in it. The rhythm is slightly off at one point but apart from that is good...now you goota comment on mines :P
 
Thanks guys.

I don't usually write poems and stuff just this subject really gets to me and I wrote it just cause it was running through my head a while ago, and Wolf I will comment on one of yours soon so :P
 
I like how the first line goes against what the second lines says and so on, it really brings something to the poem. I really like how every other line seems to rhyme nearly all the way though.
Great work, keep it up. ^_^
 
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