Poetry Unfaithful

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This is something I wrote a while back, I'm into poetry and rap, but this one isn't much of hip hop (if you can't tell, there isn't a lot of rhythm), I my friends found it cool, tell me what you think. I'll upload other stuff I've written later on.

Slowly you pick up the broken, jagged, pieces of your heart from the floor. And it's hard to ignore the silent sobs your partner deplores. As tumbling tears travel her weary wrinkles. Leaving scars of remorse. You pause for a second as the ball lands hard in your court. "Wait!" the woman cries "please give it another try,". And you gulp anxiously as you stare into your ex-lovers eyes. Their pale, sullen, guise seems to trick you again. As you stand there helplessly, hoping the howling winds will whisk you away. Because you're a man, and your too proud to admit your mistakes. That's when it hits you. The soft, sobering, kiss of the rain. Droplets are hitting the pavement when you lock lips with Lorraine. As you count down the hours until you can see her sister again...
 
Impressive, I like it a lot. It seems that you're very good at writing, at least poetry. Do you write stories as well? I'd like to read more.
 
I used to write stories, sort of fan fics of Final Fantasy, I just used the Restore the Crystals idea, and filled it in with characters, conflict, villains and the like. But that was a while ago... I never finished it, and I've lost the files, so there isn't really anyway I can find them again. I'll post some some short writtens of poetry and songs later on though, so you'll get to read more :P. Thanks for reading.
 
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