Poetry The Poem of the lone wolf

[Dark-Angel]

The Poem of the Lone Wolf of Love<o></o>

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To live without love<o></o>​

Or to live with it<o></o>​

To live as free as the dove<o></o>​

Or chained with one more heart to commit<o></o>
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The feeling of happiness and joy<o></o>​

The feeling of having love<o></o>​

The true bonds that connect girl and boy<o></o>​

That feeling that makes you soar above<o></o><o></o>

That feeling of love becomes no more<o></o>​

When you are rejected and tossed away<o></o>​

It turns to sorrow as it once was before<o></o>​

Love becomes darkness that destroys the day<o></o><o></o>

No one to love, no one to wander with<o></o>​

A feeling of longing for love deep down inside<o></o>​

The feeling of knowing love is only a myth<o></o>​

It destroys your mind and takes the joy with tide<o></o><o></o>

Then again, being lonely isn’t all bad<o></o>​

A fugitive of emotions you no longer are<o></o>​

No one to care for, all the peace you’ve ever had<o></o>​

A lone wolf of night, a reflection of a star<o></o>
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To live without love<o></o>​

Or to live with it<o></o>​

To love as free as the dove<o></o>​

Or chained with one more heart to commit<o></o>​

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Hope ya like it. thats the second of my poems.

Tell me what you think of it?

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[The Phantarch]

Have you took anything I said on board at all?!

This is not great. Sorry.

I'll tell you what. I'll E-mail you a good song-writing guide. That'll show you the basics of what it means to be a good lyricist.

 

[SapphireStar]

<!-- google_ad_section_start(weight=ignore) -->The Phantarch<!-- google_ad_section_end -->, theres no need for that sort of critism. Yes, do comment on the persons work. But to almost snap at them for not taking on board help is abit OTT. This person may like their lyrics and didnt want to alter them. Respect that please.

 

[The Phantarch]

Okay, I apologise.
I've sent the guide in a PM anyway.

I hope you (Lone Wolf) find it useful.

 

[Dark-Angel]

<!-- google_ad_section_start(weight=ignore) -->The Phantarch<!-- google_ad_section_end -->, theres no need for that sort of critism. Yes, do comment on the persons work. But to almost snap at them for not taking on board help is abit OTT. This person may like their lyrics and didnt want to alter them. Respect that please.

Yay! *hugs SapphireStar*

At least someone is appreciating me!

and thanx for the guide Phantarc!

 

[The Phantarch]

You're welcome, please keep it in mind.

Angst is not the way forward, that's one of the basics.

I look forward to your next post here.

 

[Dark-Angel]

i just usually post a new literature in a new thread...and i come up with one every month...lawly