Original Sethra

[LynxGirl]

Well, I've been writing this novel, and a lot of people love it. It's not finished yet though, and I love getting other peoples' opinions and idea's on how it can be improved. Well, here it is:

The Crystal Chronicles:
Book One
Sethra​

By,
*LynxGirl*​

Introduction to 'The Chrystal Chronicles'​

“Welcome. Here, I will introduce you to the world of 'The Chrystal Chronicles'. First, you should know one thing about me; I like to have a reason for everything. Even if it is a fictional story. I just have a special talent of being able to do that without ruining the entire thing. For this set of stories, my explanation is that they are set in another world, and another time. That other world is called 'Erta'. They have their own vocabulary, which is only slightly different from my own. Here are those other words, their meanings, and an explanation of what they are is relation to this set of stories.”​

Erta ̶The planet we live on.​

Luna −Our beautiful, golden colored moon. She is said to be evil, but is really only evil to some people; those who despise Her. ​

Demï −A god or goddess that rules over only one specific element. They always live on Erta. They also take the form of an animal, even though their true form is that of a human. They are typically used for transference spells on humans because of that.​

Dæmon −A mortal who has had a transference spell preformed on them, making them half mortal and half animal. They can only return to their original form by killing the person that killed them in the first place.​

Luna's tongue −The very first language spoken on Erta. All gods and goddesses speak it, as well as the other two languages.​

Latin −The second language spoken on Erta. All spells are written in Latin, and all sorcerers and sorceresses learn it before they learn Tarkn.​

Tarkn −The third and final language spoken on Erta. All mortals can speak it.​

Era −An era changes every time the world ends and is reborn. With each new era comes a new pure immortal god or goddess. We are currently in the Era of Souls, and our goddess is Scerintia.​

Pure immortal god/ goddess −They are the only immortals that cannot die, even though they do die, but since they, as all immortals, live outside of time. They cannot die in any measurable amount of time, so it seems that they cannot die. There are three of them and they take turns being Erta's god or goddess every era. They are, in order, as follows:​

Sitana Scerintia
Majim Erta
Broata Waer​

“Well, I think you can get a pretty good idea of what is going on just from that. I suppose that that is all for now, but I'll be adding more later.”​

Character Biographies:​

Se†hra
Legendary warrior
Light Warrior
Dæmon (mortal+cat)
Lunar Eclipse
Wrist shield
24
Female​

Daemon form​

Mortal form​

Sethra is a legendary warrior who made herself famous as a killer at a young age by making a living as a bounty hunter. Her parents were both killed when she was 11, which is what provoked her to become a bounty hunter at the age of 15; the youngest age you could be to become a bounty hunter in her village. She was killed avenging her parents' death by killing the
man that killed them. As she killed him, she was shot with a single arrow. It went through her back and through her heart and killed her.​

Runiti (Mage)
Mage
Sorcerer
Human
Jeweled staff
Sacred amulet
??? ​

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Male
Not much is known about this man. Since his name is unknown to Sethra and Maknii, they call him simply 'Mage'. He wears his cloak at all times.​

Maknii
Mercenary
Warrior
Daemon (mortal+cat)
Blunt blade
Fanned buckle
26
Male​

* Daemon form​

Maknii is a loner, which only makes sense since he is a payed
assassin. He may have done many things he is not proud of, but
he seems to have a dark secret that is unimaginably horrible.​

Day 1​

"Hello. My name is Sethra."​

'My story begins thirteen years ago when I was eleven. I lived in a big house because my family was rich. I remember the day as if it were only yesterday. There had been a war going on for five years, and that was the day it finally reached my village. A small raiding party of two men came to our house. I was the first one to see them, and I only really saw the leader. I never forgot what he looked like; blood-red hair, the same color as the blood on his sword, a dark brown jacket with a red-orange shirt underneath, and hot-pink eyes.​

My parents hid me so that I would not get injured. Even though they had taught me how to fight with a sword and with a bow and arrow, I still wasn't very good yet, and I especially hated the bow. I fell asleep in the cabinet that they had hidden me in, so I was unaware of what was happening.​

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When I awoke, all was silent, so I came out of the cabinet. Then I saw the most horrifying thing I had ever seen. My parents, my uncle, my grandmother, and our butler were all lying dead with dark, scarlet, pools of blood surrounding them. I was sad and angry. I prepared to leave. I knew that I would never return to that house again. I took my favorite sword; the Lunar Eclipse, about a dozen poison darts, my wrist shields, a set of psychic daggers, and the clothes on my back.​

Four years later, when I was fifteen, I became a bounty hunter. That line of work provided me with the two things I needed; money, and a way to find the man that killed my family. And I did. Just yesterday. I went out to look at the posters to see who I would try to find when I saw it; a poster that exactly matched the mental image I had of him. His name is, or should I say was, Joran.​

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As I was walking to where I figured he'd be, which was headed on a travelers' back road to King Kayo's kingdom. His evil reign, legend says, began when he killed his brother and exiled his brother's daughter. I really don't doubt it. Before that, before the war, the kingdom of Hakiayo was said to be the most beautiful and prosperous land. Not anymore, though.
How will I kill him? I asked myself. How will I kill that man so that his death can be as slow snd as painful as the life he has given me, since he killed my family? ​

"I know!" I whipered under my breath.
I'll use one of my psychic daggers! It'll suck out his soul and all of the life in him. I brought them just for him, you know.​

"There he is!" I charged at him blindly. I let my rage get the better of me, and, in that instant, I lost my greatest weapon; the element of surprise. Oh well. I'll kill him anyways!!!!!!!!!!!​

"DIE!!!!!!!!!"​

"Huh!?!" Apearently he hadn't noticed me! How stupid can you be!?? I had already slashed his throat open by the time he realizrd I was there! He began coughing up gobs of blood, and I knew i had to act quickly. If i didn't peirce his heart with the dagger before he died, it would have no effect. ​

"Good-bye, and good-riddance." I said as I stabbed his heart with my dagger and watched the life leave his eyes, a smug look on my face.​

*GASP*-​

"AAAAAUUUGH!!!" I was shot with an arrow! I am dying....'​

* pictures coming soon *​

So, what do you all think so far? And yes, that does mean there is more to the story which will be posted as soon as I finish typing it. As stated before, I would love to see your opinion on what could be improved in the story. Thanks!