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In order: Hayden, Seong, Kim, Mai, Grace


The Final Lullaby
Prologue...

"I always thought there would be a way out. You know, a place to...vent? Somewhere you can go to tell something everything, someone who will listen and not just nod there heads and demand money from you for it. I needed to actually speak to someone, a friend. There were so many things I just wanted to get off my chest, and the only I could do that was to end it all. I had decided that I would never talk again, never love again. I'd never dream, or wish. I'd finally be alone, so I took it upon me to take the pills. I took more than prescribed. It felt good for the first ten minutes, then the world starting to spin around. My eyes were fluttering constantly, it felt as if I was completely and utterly drunk. After five more minutes, I started to feel sink and a painful grip in my stomach, it felt as if I was being stabbed.

It finally came to and end. I got my final wish, I made sure I'd set everything up ready. I wanted to make it perfect, I wanted everyone to known I had gone. I wanted to make an impact. I was bullied at school, every day I'd be called names. General stuff intending that I'm insane, I have no life and I'm ugly. I couldn't handle any of it and although I can forgive those who made me feel pain, I cannot forgive the five who watched me be bullied. The five people who stood and over heard the name calling, the abuse. The five people who knew something was going on, and the only five the could do something. They did nothing. I've done some planning and left them some surprises behind. They'll find them, and they won't like them. I'll make them pay. They are the reason I ended it. The reason is because...

They are the five people who killed me."


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The story is basically about a young girl; named, Elizabeth, was bullied at school. Elizabeth is the only person was aware that she had some form of mental illness, nobody knew about her health concerns. Her parents were never with her, and she lived alone. Elizabeth would be abused at her school, by everyone except five people. Hayden, Seong, Kim, Mai and Grace. Elizabeth was too shy, and conciousness to speak to them, because of her health, it had made her think they were the same, but inside she knew they were not. Elizabeth began to recognised regular patterns in their lives, what they did on weekends, what they liked and what they did not and decided to play a game. Elizabeth wanted to tease the five, after noticing that whenever she was being bullied, they would do nothing. Elizabeth set up some surprises and twists for the group to make them realises what they have done, and how it affected her. After planning everything, and everything being set up, Elizabeth killed herself. Once the signal was sent out that she had died, the game began.

Please leave any constructive criticism you have here, I'd really like to hear it. I would like to know your thoughts. What you like about this story, and what you don't. It will help me improve. Thank you.

I'm going to post the Character Profiles here soon, so stay tuned for more. Enjoy reading "The Final Lullaby" when I begin it. Thanks again.

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Character Profiles

HAYDEN
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Full Name: Hayden Lee
Birthplace: California, United States
Ethnicity: Korean-American
Birthdate: 17th December
Age: 19
Dating: Grace Howard
Sexual Orientation: Heterasexual.

Height: 5'10"
Weight: 148lbs.

Studying: Music Practise & Theory (Violin)
Music Practise & Theory (Piano)
School: L.A Academy of Arts.

Likes: Music, cooking, games and history.
Dislikes: Bad attitudes and heights.

Hayden is your typical boy next door. Incredibly positive,
with a light-hearted temperament. He will try to make
light of any situation, no matter how serious they seem.

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SEONG
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Full Name: Seong Bon-Hwa
Birthplace: Gwangju, South Korea
Ethnicity: Korean
Birthdate: 24th March
Age: 22
Dating: -
Sexual Orientation: Homosexual

Height: 5'3"
Weight: 114lbs.

Studying: Dance Practise & Theory
School: L.A Academy of Arts.

Likes: Reading, sleep, dancing and karaoke.
Dislikes: Helplessness and lack of control.

Events surrounding Seong's life have permanently
tarnished his confidence and feeling of self-worth.
He will generally keep to himself and avoid
unnecessary social confronatiations at any cost.
However, behind an unconformatble and reserved
exterior remains a truly carrying and sweet-mannered
person, and an undeniably valuable friend.

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KIM
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Full Name: Kim Jin Wu
Birthplace: Shanghai, China.
Ethnicity: Chinese
Birthdate: 7th August
Age: 20
Dating: Mai Yoo
Sexual Orientation: Bisexual.

Height: 6'1"
Weight: 176lbs.

Studying: Dance Practise & Theory
School: L.A Academy of Arts.

Likes: Dancing, soccer, tattoos and chinese cuisine.
Dislikes: Poor personal hygiene and defiance.

Kim has natural air of self-admiration and egocentricity.
His God complex holds him above any of his friends or
asscosiates. Sociable, and talkative, but very arragant.
He has a tendancy to manipulate lesser people to get
his own way.

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MAI
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Full Name: Mai Yoo
Birthplace: Seoul, South Korea
Ethnicity: Korean
Birthdate: 17th April
Age: 19
Dating: Kim Jin Wu
Sexual Orientation: Bisexual.

Height: 5'4"
Weight: 129lbs.

Studying: Dance Practise & Theory
School: L.A Academy of Arts.

Likes: Dancing, music and cute jewellery.
Dislikes: Lies and dishonesty.

With Mai's flirtacious and seductive demeanor disgrarded,
a surprisingly hardworking and passionate young woman is
allowed to show through. Much of Mai's drive has lead to
longterm (if what turbulent) relationship with Kim and herself-
a feat worthy or merit in itself.

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GRACE
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Full Name: Grace Howard
Birthplace: Washington, United States
Ethnicity: American
Birthdate: 21st June
Age: 19
Dating: Hayden Lee
Sexual Orientation: Heterasexual.

Height: 5'6"
Weight: 123lbs

Studying: Vocal Training
School: L.A Academy of Arts.
Likes: Singing, art, travelling and aquatics.
Dislikes: Cold weather, and unfamilarity

Grace is very much an object of adoration to Hayden - a
feeling which has remained mutual and strong through
their relationship. However, whilst a pleasant girl to be
acquainted to, Grace can be hard to please, and ultimately
makes her a demanding girlfriend.
 
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