When You Can't See the Sun [Discussion]

August 25, 2008, 4:26 AM

Humans
Dr. Calvin Opal Wesson
Helene L. Lafleche
xJacob P. Laflechex
- Died when American Space Explorer was fired on. Severe head wound.
Joshua Jerome Williams
General Chuck D. Murray
Private Freddy Verome
Private Mercury Gomez
xPrivate Adam Deviesx
- Died when American Space Explorer was fired on. Unknown death.
Lady Allison W. Stanford
Sara G. Durges
Katelyn R. Harrison
Dr. Astrid Rachelle Beauro
xSir Phillip D. Frankelx
- Died when American Space Explorer was fired on. Unknown death.
xArthur C. Doylex
- Died when American Space Explorer was fired on. Unknown death.
xDr. Yamamoto Mitsugishux
- Died when American Space Explorer was fired on. Unknown death.
xKenneth D. Baobkox
- Died when American Space Explorer was fired on. Unknown death.

Aliens

(Waiting for Ness' list)

The story is going to be done by Ness and myself, I'll control the humans and Ness the aliens. The deceased are in spoiler tags.
One human and one alien will survive. This is for general discussion of the story, as well as where everyone can debate who the last survivor will be (I'd also like feedback, but it's preferred to be more detailed). Everyone gets one "Official" guess, and they must PM their guess to either Ness or myself, depending on if you're choosing to guess for an alien or a human.
If you get it right, you'll either receive rep, the option to choose who dies next, or a guest post without killing anyone. If you guess both in one try, then you can guest post and kill someone, and of course you'll get rep.
If you do guess it, please do not tell anyone, so that the story can stay interesting. Depending on how many have died when you guess it determines which of the three you receive. Any questions, comments, concerns?

Happy birthday!

When You Can't See the Sun...

August 25, 2008, 5:45 AM

Can't wait to read more, sounds like it'll be really interesting.
Only thing is that in the third chunk of the first post your tenses seem to be a little big switched up, since the rest of the post is in 'he or she' format and that part goes through both 'them' and 'we'. If that makes any sense.

August 25, 2008, 5:46 AM

Yes. I tried to fix that, too. I'll go edit before anyone else read it! lol.

August 25, 2008, 6:34 AM

Hey it was pretty good. Can't wait until the next one!

I like how you have the point of view from each of the living people on the ship. Makes things a little more interesting. =)

September 12, 2008, 11:08 PM

Hey Doa nice story I only read a little bit but it is interesting and has a depth to it.

September 13, 2008, 6:04 AM

Thanks. Glad you like it. I'll probably write another one tomorrow. Tomorrow is Saturday right? Hell yea. I love not having school on Fridays. I rock.