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no offense but they are generic.
most poems written by teenagers are about how bad things are and how much what is happening to them sucks.
what im saying seems a bit harsh but what i mean is that they arent even slightly unique.
the first one has no structure.
you confuse the tenses
poems are songs, there is no chorus so you dont have to repeat the same stanza, repetition is good but only when its a word or idea is repeated, not a whole stanza. the execption is the tyger but blake is great.
as for the last one, couplets being thrown together doesnt constitute a poem imo.
it doesnt provoke thought, it doesnt question what love is or love itself.
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