final fantasy vii cloud fan fic

July 10, 2008, 9:34 AM

hey im Cloud i made this fanfic off of one that i read that pretty much told you what happened before final fantasy vii ( writen before crisis core was made ) from all of the clips in the ffvii game this is a story about cloud failing in the soldier eliminations chapter one

CHAPTER ONE
He woke it was a dark day on the small island off the coast of midgar. He had arrived at the island a couple of days before on a small boat with a couple of others whose names he couldn’t recall at the moment. The moment he arrived on land he was sick not that he wasn’t sick on the way here he was sick almost all the way from nibelheim. Motion sickness was his main problem, that and he missed his mother and his best friend (well his only friend from nibelheim) Tifa Lockheart.

The man in charge of this training facility was one 1st class Angeal gave cloud 2 days to get better before training started. Angeal had taken an immediate interest in 2 of the new recruits. one of them cloud strife of nibelheim and the other Zack Fair of gongaga both at a great age to start training 14 this way they have a great amount of energy and dreams angeal couldn’t remember having dreams anymore he just did what was ordered of him

3 days after cloud arrived training started they started with basic drills cloud fell into the rhythm fairly easily and angeal told him he was a natural this was a great boost for him as he was always too small to defend himself, that was until Tifa got injured and the other children tifa’s so called fiends lied and blamed it all on cloud then three teenagers beat him up and then when they got a beating from there parents for doing it they went at it again but this time cloud took them that was a breaking point for cloud he never stood down from a challenge and was always quick to anger. He wanted to join SOLDIER and become famous just like Sephiroth so that he could prove to everyone that he was strong. Cloud was not the only one who angeal noticed to be a natural Zack was progressing just as fast (if not faster than) cloud.

As the days turned to weeks and weeks into months Cloud and Zack formed a bond of friendship as they were often paired for sparing being the same age and close to the same height ( Zack being a little bit taller then cloud) on one of their rest days Zack came to cloud .

“Hey Cloud” Zack said” do you wanna go for a walk around the island “
“Sure why not?” Cloud replied
“Cool I’ll meet you at the gate in a couple of minutes il go grab some food and stuff so we can have a bite to eat if we get hungry”
"Alright I’ll meet you at the gate then “

As cloud walked to the gate he passed a couple of 17 year old SOLDIER wanna bees. Cloud didn’t really get along with these two as he was scrawny and didn’t socialise in the mess like the rest of the hopefuls, he was to busy trying to think of a way to better himself as a soldier. The two boys laughed at clouds hand and a half sword that he took everywhere that he went ( the island outside the camp was wild and there was a lot of monsters out there) they pulled their own swords as cloud passed them and sensing rather then seeing one of their small short swords about to strike Cloud with all the speed he possessed turned and pulled his sword in one fluid motion months of training and honing his skills helped he blocked the strike then in less than a second he had to block another then another strike after strike rising and falling high low after a couple of minutes of this cloud noticed a rhythm that the two were following a high followed by a low then a middle strike then a head strike and so on he knew it was bad to get into a rhythm and that it could get you killed in the field cloud also noticed a small crowd surrounding them now he decided that it was time to go on the offensive after the head strike he quickly jumped back and to strike at him the taller of the two seventeen year olds had to get off balance and cloud struck him in the head with the flat of his sword then he jumped forward into the guard of the second seventeen year old dropping his blade to land point first in the dirt ( sticking up easy to grab should he need it)and he pummelled the boys stomach with a couple of well placed punches they were taught in training then he bent over on one leg sticking the other out and putting one hand on the ground as a counter balance to dodge an attack with the aim to lob off his head. The seventeen your old over balanced and fell on cloud dropping his blade he started pummelling cloud in the face stomach anywhere he could punch he did then out of nowhere a strong gust of wind blew the seventeen year old into the air a couple of meters to fall to the ground winded. Then a second or so later ( cloud didn’t know he was too disorientated) he saw Zack leaning over him with angeal standing just behind him“Alright you lot clear off fights over” angeal exclaimed

“Th-th-thank you” cloud muttered out of breath
“Its alright you should be thanking Zack he is the one who used a strong aero spell to get Chris off of you”
Zack looking sheepish smiled at Cloud” well I couldn’t let him beat you into the ground then I wouldn’t have a sparing partner”
Cloud laughed at that then passed out from a cut he received in the first couple of strikes of the fight bleeding profusely.

A couple of minutes later he woke again to find Zack gone and in his place Angeal. “Hmmmm” muttered Angeal “ok I’m going to try a curaga spell to heal this cut is that ok” he asked.“Yes thank you” cloud mouthed weakly from loss of blood
Just as that happened Zack returned with a couple of Materia he gave one to Angeal and he held the other.

After angeal had the material in his left hand he pushed it into his right arm and muttered a couple of silent words, Then after a couple of seconds Clouds pain stoped and he suddenly felt a lot better he stood up and Zack passed him his sword.“Thanks” cloud said
“NOW” shouted angeal at the top of his lungs

“ CHRIS AND ISACC HERE NOW”
Both boys slowly walked up
“WHAT WAS YOUR INTENT ON ATACKING YOUNG CLOUD HERE”
Both quickly replied in unison “just a bit of fun sir”
“Well that’s not good enough both of you have guard duty for the next two weeks and you are banned from using Materia for the next month”. The two boys stalked off angry for loosing.

“So where were you headed Cloud” asked angeal
“I was headed to the gate sir” cloud replied “Zack and I were going to go for a run along the coast and maybe have dinner and camp out in the wild tonight”
“Well I bid you farewell until tomorrow” angeal stated as he stalked off after a trouble maker or some such.
“So when where you planning on telling me about the camping out there tonight” zack asked cloud.
“Well I figured that would sound better then just going for a walk” he replied
He headed towards stores and got a tent some Materia and a couple of sleeping bags he put some of the dried food in a bag attached a sleeping bag to the bag and the other to another with a small axe for cutting wood and some cooking utensils. Then he was off with zack in tow their baggage between them.

i will make more when i finish chapters two ect

please comments i would love some feed back maybe make it better

**MY YOUT00B** · July 10, 2008, 9:49 AM

Paragraphs, proofreading, and a font color that's easy on the eyes will help. I tried reading it but with all of those factors, it's too stressful on my eyes.

July 10, 2008, 9:57 AM

Long Paragraphs are long I'm bored reading and my eyes are hurting me the color you chose was pretty bad also I think most of us know what happened before Final Fantasy VII >.>

July 10, 2008, 10:12 AM

true but this is something never mentioned in anything about how he came to become a shinra foot soldier instead of a famous SOLDIER operative

July 12, 2008, 11:06 AM

ok new chapter ( its short i might add to it later)

CHAPTER TWO
Cloud leaped back from the ferocious attack of the little coeurl Zack was preoccupied with the other two keeping them at bay. Cloud leaped as high as he could and came at the smallest that was trying to kill him from above removing its head from its body then in a single movement he leaped over zack and killed another then zack killed the last as it tried to flee from the two killers.
“Wow I wasn’t expecting that “cloud said heavily only a little tired
“No me neither” replied zack sweating only a little bit

They picked up their bags and continued on for a couple of kilometres at a slow jog. After they reached the designated camping place they dropped their bags and moved to the stream twenty meters from the clearing and filled their water bottles then stripped off and dove in. they swam for the better part of an hour then got out and got dressed and made camp.

Cloud set about getting some wood for the fire while Zack made the tents and dug a toilet. When cloud returned they left the clearing to find some herbs to cook their bland camp meals with.
After a half hour they found the herbs they needed.

“There over here” cloud shouted to Zack who was 15 meters away
“Great” Zack replies “I’ll race you back to camp”.
And before cloud could say anything zack was off cloud not that far behind all the worries of training for soldier forgotten.
They ate their meal and went to bed after an uneventful talk about their pasts.

thats all for now please read and comment i want feedback thanks

Cloud

July 14, 2008, 6:36 AM

please leave comments please

i really want feedback

thank you

Cloud

July 14, 2008, 6:42 AM

Improve on sentencing. Seriously, it's not good when you keep on using conjunctions after conjunctions in a sentence - and someone did this and then someone did that i.e.

I don't know if other people have read your first chapter completely - I couldn't. Change that first, make much shorter sentences, but, not too short so that it's like...just 4 words long.

July 14, 2008, 6:49 AM

ok il see how that goes

July 14, 2008, 6:53 AM

It will makes things a lot better, trust me - make sure other punctuation is pretty good too. If you need to use more then one conjunction, try not to make a constant repetition, include different ones if possible.