No, no hatred Red Fox, those objections are totally cool and personally, the vague history I wrote up last night will extremely tired from work...
I'll edit that...
I think I may actually completely revamp my guy so, sorry guys, but you're going to have to re-read it completely...
I don't like him so much any more...

If you must know Marilith I am a knida nut for historys. See my new character in the hall of warriors (sorry no link) to see what I mean by history length. Or perhaps some of foxes characters. I really like the history of his character Jonad.

Well it is only a quick history and mine is currently longer than yours or Kira Yamato's...

ok, here we go again.

First of all, Id like to state that a long bio is rarely nessesairy. but it DOES explain a lot about the character
look at mine
Some have longer history then your whole bio.

so, off to the new character
First of all, Teleportation is NOT allowed in RP's this is stated by the rules somewhere.
Regardless if it is 100 meters, or 2 inches

The weather control is ok. but you don't state the length it takes to do things.
Like, from a clear blue sky, how long will it take to make a lightning strike, at the fastest.
also, of you have weather control, you have to take the logical real life notes into your notes.
Since lightning is created by ESD (Electro Static Discharge)
so, since there is a static buildup in the clouds, that later releases the lightning.

Also. you have to take the previous weather into consideration.
if there have just been a drought.
Then the lightning might cause a fire.
Or a blizzard, in a desert location. That will take time, since the sands are already warm.

Also, you have no defined energy loss (AKA, Mana drain) to when you do this.

So, you have some explaining to do ^^

NOTE, I haven't read the history yet.
so I wont nag on that, not yet at least.
Fix up the magic section, and completly remove the teleportation
and Ill have another look.

Oh the reason for Rey's history not being that long is because I am currently writing the rest in the NERP, and the history for Rey does not need to be that long as a result.

Yes, I too am a stickler for histories but it is a short history...
About the powers, I guess I'll change those again... didn't know about the teleportation so I'll alter that.

It's done, the profile is now edited power-wise...