Breed Of Criminals - Page 3

February 17, 2008, 7:35 PM

I don't have much against your character.
except the fact that my character already has 100% control over the water/ice spectrum.

Also. the heat issue.
it seems as if you have copied my character, but instead of a gift from a god, it is a racial trait.

so. It can be interesting ^^
The overall power, depends on the knowledge of water/ice. And how well you have thought thought your character.
ask Kira, I have given id a great deal of thought ^^

But it is all up to YMV.

February 17, 2008, 7:40 PM

As Red fox said the only problem with your character is the Ice manipulation as his character also uses Ice manipulation as his main ability along with water, i just piss about with the hydrogen atoms in it to blow things up

February 18, 2008, 12:30 AM

Please add a history for your character, I am not even going to consider approving him until then. Otherwise I'm with fox and Kira, the characters have very similar abilities. I'm not sure If I like this or not, seeing as mine in fire. It could be interesting none the less.

February 18, 2008, 10:17 AM

Ah, fair enough, I didn't know where your character was posted Red Fox, so I'll change mine completely then.
(See character post)

February 18, 2008, 11:26 AM

well.
it is better. however, this part I dont like

Quote:

a form of intense energy that resists all magic and most physical blows.

No one should be resistance to all kinds of magics, nor any single one.

you can be restsTANT to some magics
but again, not too much, since this is power gaming.

February 18, 2008, 1:16 PM

again i agree with fox the barrier which resists everything is to much of a power play

February 19, 2008, 6:24 AM

I'm actually no fan of this bio what so ever. The whole aspect of losing years of his life ... it is pointless, and crazy power strong shield. At least you some history of the character in there in now. Explain how he killed demonfather, weaken the shield and perhaps I'll reconsider.

But until then you are NOT APPROVED.

February 19, 2008, 8:13 AM

Alright, I'll edit the demon form a heap. Just an idea.

February 19, 2008, 10:10 AM

well.
you removed the shield, this is good.
but, you will hate me for this.

since you specify that he uses different dances.
You have to describe all of them.
this is so that we know what we might expect.
You don't have to enter detail. but at least the strength and weakness is a must.

I'm normally OK with short histories.
but this doesn't state much.
also, it is way to cliché for my tastes
I think I have seen the exact same history on 12 different characters
and yours is one of the ones that are most vague.

February 20, 2008, 12:23 AM

I will re read, once you have edited from what Fox said.