ORPG and/or RPB: orpg and rpb

Name: Dean Haragatsu

Title: Prince

Race: iceian-they are specifically known for staying in and controlling ice completely.Their powers have limits but their powers also are deadley.They must drink at least 5 gallons of ice cold water a day just to sustain their power and body temperature.They are somewhat resopurce with a neko human in some traits.

Gender: Male.

Age: 25.


Apperance-
He has blue spikey hair with a bang covering his left eye.It reaches all the way down his head and short around the ears and also the front is short and reveiles one half of his face.
He has one blue neko eye on the left and one blue human eye on the right.
Hie eyebrows are blue as well.
He is 6 feet tall and of white skin complexion.
He has a blue x shaped scar on the axel of his nose.
He weighs 190 pounds.He is slim.He wars a black leather jacket with silver spikes on the edge and knuckle braces with the same silver spikes.His shorts are leather as well with spikes on the edges and he also wears a white tee shirt underneath his jacket.

Personality: If he was with his freinds hede joke around and feel real comfortable if he trusts you as much.He wouldent be as comfortable or talkutive if he dosent trust you.In dire situations like hostage and such hse is the first to save his freinds on his own or not he will give it his all.He acts honorable and loyal unto them but hsi trust is somewhat hard to earn.

First Impression: He is ok to talk to but he keeps some things bodeled in unless he sees something wrong.IF ytou seem like an innocent nice person he will treat you niceley but if you are mean and sorta bully like thats when he steps into action.He is easy to talk to if aproached properly.
Weapon(s): He has to medium sized double bladed ice katanas.He has 10 smoke bombs in his pocket for escape methods.His katana is made out of ppure ice and it also holds a specail ability called freezing slash.

Armor: no armor

Magic: ice armor.-it allows Dean to be covered in ice for protection.It blcoks him from breing hurt for as long as his energy can hold out.He usually stops at 10 percent of his energy to be left so he wouldent pass out completely yet it leaves him tired and exaughsted.
Winter setting-It is used to change the weather temporarily for one day but for this to happen he is to use half of his energy.It will slow the enemy down in movement and those who are not used to the cold will be slowed as well.The stteing will be changed to a snowy blizard.To cause this the particals of cold are all bunched togehter.The cold particals are found in everything and one all he does is take them out of there and uses it to his advantage.He even uses himself.
Ice blast-He uses all of his energy in this attack to freeze the oppeonent completely.It will knock him out for one hole battle and leave him exaughsted if he was to fight again without one days rest.
Freezing slash-He uses the particals to make his katana freezing cold as he runs up and slashes his enemy.In this it will leave a wound and a poisen inside of it which till take 10 percent of their health away each turn.It takes 25 percent of his energy away to do this.

Abilities/Skills: He is used to freezing tempuratures.He has the ability to build whatever he desires out of pure ice.

Quick History: He was born an iceian on the planet Neptune.He went threw training with his brother as do everyone trains to fight their siblings just in case a war breakes out.His brother used a freezing slash with 50 percent of his energy which led to the x shaped scar since he did it twice.His brother was jelouse of what Dean was going to be and did the slash twice as a main intent to kill him.After the second slice their father sent his brother awaty into prison for as long as the days may pass.He was supposed to be the king of hics race until a meteor hit Neptune and sent icians in variouse locations.When he was 10 he landed upon earth.He has already knew the language english all icians spoke it.He then began to raise himself independentally along earth.He finds himself in virtue of who is his parents and where are they.He yet trusts few upon the paths that he has tooken of liers of all sortss.He learned of his powers since he was five and ever since it flourished in his experience of living.He trained himself untill this very day still questioning everything.Most recentley since the crash he has lost some of his memory.He hardley remembers the meteor crash or even how he learned of his powers.His main excuse is that they just came to him.

well for one, take out all the text that was there to explain each part of the bio. like "required" and "optional" they are a bit distracting while reading.
Is your title Prince, because I think you made a typo so that there is a smiley instead of the "P"
you got everything for the appearance as far as I can see, but maybe just separate it a bit, where each feature has it's own line. makes it a bit easier to read.

for the weapons, what makes them Ice katanas? are the blades made of ice, or do they have freezing properties to them?

Your ice armor doesn't have to continuously drain his energy. you could have it so it takes energy to produce it, and fill in camaged parts on it.

Your winter setting is interesting, but you may need to add more detail to it, like how does the weather change? Does it cause blizzard like weather?

Your Ice blast is good, because the downside balances out the effect, but I do have to warn you on using it. It could only be used in a regular rp ont a rpb. also when going against a major enemy, they may have a chance to break free to keep the battle going.

maybe add one more attack type spell. a weak one that could be used to help mix things up in battle.

in the history, tell of how he got his x-shaped scar

And also you might want to put the history through spell check to make it easier to read when shen or vegnya get to this.

Other than that you are doing good. just say when you've edited it so I could give another look over, then I'll get shen or vegnya to come and check for approval.

i changed it

alright this looks good to me, now we'll get a mod to give it the final look over for approval.

ok